Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 길고 문법 실수가 있습니다. 먼저 주제문을 간결히 말한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 이유와 구체적 예를 덧붙이세요. 동사 시제와 형태(watching → watch)를 고치고, 너무 많은 정보를 한 문장에 넣기보다 2~3문장으로 나눠 말하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘people walking the street’ 같은 표현은 ‘people walking on the street’처럼 전치사를 정확히 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by car or bus. I enjoy watching the changing views because they help me relax. For example, seeing people walking on the street or children playing often makes me feel happy.

Gợi ý: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. ‘Every time I take photos’는 빈도 표현으로 자연하나, 주어-동사 일치(‘I really like’)와 관사 사용(‘a taking a photo’ → 불필요한 관사)을 고쳐야 합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 간단한 연결어(for example, because)와 한두 가지 구체적 예시를 추가하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window. I really like keeping memories, so I take pictures to remember special moments. For example, I usually photograph interesting buildings or beautiful sunsets I see on the road.

Gợi ý: 의견은 분명하지만 문장 시작과 문법(‘See for sure’→‘Sea, for sure’ or better ‘The sea, for sure’) 및 동사 일치(‘I really like the blue color’/‘I feel’ 등)을 바로잡아야 합니다. 이유를 더 구체적으로 연결해 말하고, 연결어(‘because’, ‘also’, ‘for example’)를 적절히 사용해 문장을 2문장으로 나누어 표현하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ví dụ: The sea, for sure. I love the blue color and the sound of the ocean because it makes me feel relaxed and free. Also, I find sunsets over the sea especially beautiful, which is another reason I prefer it.

× Yes, I often look out the window when traveling by car or bus because I like to watch the changing views and it makes me feel relaxed and when I watching some people walking the street it makes me happy.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window when traveling by car or bus because I like to watch the changing views; it makes me feel relaxed, and when I watch people walking in the street it makes me happy.

The error is incorrect verb form after 'when'. 'watching' was used where the base form 'watch' is required in this clause structure. Use 'when I watch' to express a habitual action. Also use 'walking in the street' (preposition 'in') and punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and maintain correct prepositions and clause boundaries.

× Every time I take photos of the view outside the car window. I'm a person who really like to keep the memories and I believe a taking a photo is a good method to preserve memories.

✓ I take photos of the view outside the car window every time. I'm a person who really likes to keep memories, and I believe taking a photo is a good way to preserve them.

Multiple present tense and form errors: 'Every time I take photos...' was sentence-fragmented and should be combined; 'really like' should be 'really likes' to agree with singular subject 'a person' (subject-verb agreement). 'a taking a photo' is incorrect article and gerund usage; use 'taking a photo' or 'taking photos' without extra 'a'. Also use 'way' instead of 'method' for natural phrasing and refer back with 'them'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use gerund correctly.

× See for sure because I'm a person who really like the blue of color and hearing the ocean sound makes me comfortable and feel free. Also the sunset on the sea is so pretty.

✓ Sea, for sure, because I'm a person who really likes the color blue, and hearing the sound of the ocean makes me feel comfortable and free. Also, the sunset over the sea is very pretty.

Errors include subject-verb agreement ('really like' should be 'really likes' to match 'a person'), awkward phrase 'the blue of color' should be 'the color blue', and 'hearing the ocean sound makes me comfortable and feel free' needs parallel structure: 'makes me feel comfortable and free'. Use 'sunset over the sea' rather than 'on the sea' and 'very' instead of 'so' for formality. Suggestion: keep consistent subject-verb agreement, use natural noun phrases, and maintain parallel structure in verb complements.