Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix sentence structure (e.g., subject-verb agreement, remove duplicate words).

Ví dụ: If it’s my first time visiting a place, I usually look out of the window to take in the scenery. For example, I enjoy rural landscapes with trees and mountains, so I pay attention to details like farmhouses and winding roads. However, if I’ve been there before, I tend to focus on my phone or rest instead.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct yes/no answer followed by specific reasons and a brief example. Correct word choice and phrasing (e.g., 'take photos on my phone', 'especially when travelling to new places'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos on my phone, especially when I visit new places. I do this because I want to remember the views—such as hills, mountains and green fields—and sometimes I use the pictures to share with friends or plan future trips.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and organize reasons clearly. Fix tense and grammar (use past tense consistently for childhood experiences, and concise phrases). Limit to one topic sentence and two supporting details with linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and being near water. When I was a child in Lagos State, I often went to the beach to swim, watch boats and take boat rides, which made me fond of the seaside.

× It actually depends on where I am going to, if I am going there the first time or not.

✓ It actually depends on where I am going, and whether I am going there for the first time or not.

The phrase 'going to' is redundant after 'where' because 'where' already implies destination; use 'going' alone. Also connect clauses with 'and whether' to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× I would say if I'm going to the place for the first time, I tend to look at the landscape, especially if it is a rural area whereby there are trees and mountains and eaves and other attraction that makes me look outside the window.

✓ I would say that if I'm going to a place for the first time, I tend to look at the landscape, especially in rural areas where there are trees, mountains, eaves, and other attractions that make me look out of the window.

Use 'that' to introduce the clause, and 'a place' is more natural than 'the place.' 'Whereby' is incorrect here; use 'where' or 'in which.' Use plural 'attractions' to agree with 'other' and 'make' to agree with plural subject. Use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' for correct preposition.

× But if it is a place I have I have visited before I always found myself.

✓ But if it is a place I have visited before, I usually don't look outside.

Original sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('I have I have visited') and 'I always found myself' is unnatural and lacks an object. Replace with a clear clause indicating the intended meaning; 'usually don't look outside' fits context and tense.

× Yes, I take a photograph of my environment to my phones a lot, especially while travelling to somewhere new, somewhere I've not been to before.

✓ Yes, I take a lot of photographs with my phone, especially when travelling to somewhere new that I've not been to before.

Use plural 'photographs' for multiple instances and 'with my phone' is the correct preposition. 'To my phones' is incorrect. Use 'when' rather than 'while' for this habitual action; 'somewhere new that I've not been to before' is clearer.

× I see myself to capture a lot of landscape, hills, mountains and greens and a lot of things around me.

✓ I find myself capturing a lot of landscapes, hills, mountains, greenery, and many other things around me.

'I see myself to capture' is ungrammatical; use 'I find myself capturing' or 'I tend to capture.' Use plural 'landscapes' and 'greenery' instead of 'greens.' 'Many other things' is a clearer quantifier.

× I would say I prefer the sea because I found myself to love water and swimming a lot because when I was small, I live in Lagos State so I do go to the sea a lot to swim, to have a view, to look at the boats, to do both cruise and a lot of things.

✓ I would say I prefer the sea because I love water and swimming a lot. When I was small, I lived in Lagos State, so I often went to the sea to swim, to enjoy the view, to look at the boats, and to take cruises and do many other things.

Mixed and incorrect tenses: 'I found myself to love' should be present 'I love' for a general preference. Past events should use past tense: 'I lived' and 'I often went.' 'Do both cruise' is incorrect; use 'take cruises.' Use parallel structure in the list and clearer vocabulary 'enjoy the view.'