Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Loại bỏ các tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, wow) và lỗi từ (ví dụ: "burst of a car"). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bởi một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích nhìn cảnh (ví dụ: cảm xúc, kỷ niệm, điều bạn thường chú ý). Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu. Ví dụ sửa lỗi ngữ pháp: "it brings me a sense of comfort and contributes to a relaxed mood."

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car because watching the changing landscape relaxes me. For instance, I enjoy noticing small details like roadside trees and old houses, which remind me of trips with my family. As a result, I usually feel calmer and more reflective during the journey.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Tránh cấu trúc mơ hồ như "captivate my most thrilling emotion"; thay bằng cụm từ rõ ràng hơn như "they make me feel excited or peaceful". Dùng liên từ (for example, because) để liên kết ý và giữ không quá 5 câu.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car, especially at sunrise and sunset because the light creates beautiful colors. For example, last weekend I captured a golden sky behind a line of trees, and the photo reminded me of why I love early morning drives.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng (mountains or the sea) với câu chủ đề đơn giản; tiếp theo nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể, dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "crisp air", "peaceful atmosphere"). Tránh từ sai nghĩa như "drilling out" và các tiếng ngập ngừng. Giữ cấu trúc logic bằng liên từ (because, so) và tối đa 5 câu.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the crisp, fresh air and the peaceful atmosphere. For example, hiking on a quiet trail helps me forget daily stress, and the views from the top make the effort worthwhile.

× MMM wow, so umm, observing outside the window at the scenery when travelling by burst of a car is one of my favorite activities.

✓ Observing the scenery outside the window when travelling by car is one of my favorite activities.

Original uses awkward and incorrect phrases: 'observing outside the window at the scenery' has wrong word order and redundant prepositions; 'travelling by burst of a car' is ungrammatical. Use noun phrase 'the scenery outside the window' and the correct phrase 'travelling by car'. This fixes the use of -ing as a gerund phrase acting as the subject and corrects word order and preposition use. (Note: explanation is in English as requested.)

× It brings me a sense of comfort and umm, contribute to my romantic mindset.

✓ It brings me a sense of comfort and contributes to my romantic mindset.

Subject-verb agreement with compound predicate: the subject 'It' requires verbs in third person singular form. 'bring' is correctly used as 'brings' for the first verb; the second verb must also be in third person singular: 'contributes'. Using base form 'contribute' is incorrect. Also keep parallel structure in compound predicates. (Note: explanation is in English as requested.)

× Absolutely. I really enjoy the atmosphere of sunset or sunrise, which captivate my most thrilling emotion in the day.

✓ Absolutely. I really enjoy the atmosphere of sunsets and sunrises, which captivate my most thrilling emotions of the day.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'sunsets and sunrises' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'captivate', not singular. Also 'the atmosphere of sunset or sunrise' is better as plural 'sunsets and sunrises' and 'my most thrilling emotion' should be plural 'emotions' or rephrased. This fixes agreement between referent and verb and improves noun number and clarity. (Note: explanation is in English as requested.)

× I have a reference Mountains over the Sea 'cause I uh, really enjoy the drilling out atmosphere, cooling fresh air with cap which help me to capture the moment with the most comfortable emotion.

✓ I prefer mountains over the sea because I really enjoy the crisp atmosphere and cool, fresh air, which help me capture the moment with the greatest comfort.

Multiple problems: 'I have a reference Mountains over the Sea' is ungrammatical; 'prefer mountains over the sea' is correct. 'drilling out atmosphere' is incorrect and unclear — likely meant 'crisp' or 'refreshing' atmosphere. 'cooling fresh air with cap' is wrong; use 'cool, fresh air'. 'which help' must agree with plural noun 'air' and 'atmosphere' so 'help' is correct after correction. 'the most comfortable emotion' is awkward; 'with the greatest comfort' is natural. This addresses singular/plural and word choice issues to make the sentence grammatical and natural. (Note: explanation is in English as requested.)