Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be careful with small grammar slips and redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix minor errors (e.g. "I through the countryside" → "I went through the countryside" or "traveling through the countryside I saw"). Avoid repeating ideas like "favorite parts of travelling" and "I find scenery... refreshing" too similarly; combine them to be more concise.

Ví dụ: I always look out the window when I travel because watching the landscape relaxes me. For example, on a recent bus trip through the countryside I watched rolling green hills and small villages pass by, which helped me unwind instead of scrolling on my phone.

Gợi ý: Good concise answer with a clear reason and relevant example. Correct capitalization and small phrasing: change "A dramatic sunset" to "a dramatic sunset" and prefer smoother linking (e.g. "however" or "but"). You could add one brief detail about why you limit photos to show reflection on experience.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do, but only when the view is truly impressive. For example, last summer I photographed a dramatic sunset over the mountains; however, I only took a few shots so I could enjoy the moment instead of spending the whole time behind the camera.

Gợi ý: Fix pronunciation/word choice issues and some grammar: "But recently I prefer" → "Recently, I have preferred the mountains" or "Lately I prefer the mountains." Correct adjectives and articles: "the fresh crisper" → "the fresh, crisp air"; "surrounded by the nature" → "surrounded by nature"; "hiking to a Ridge" → "hiking to a ridge." Use a topic sentence then 1–2 supporting specifics as you did, but avoid starting with filler like "That's a really tough choice."

Ví dụ: Lately I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh, crisp air, the quiet, and the feeling of being surrounded by nature. For example, hiking to a ridge and looking over the valley feels incredibly peaceful, whereas the sea is often more crowded and noisy.

× For instance, on a recent bus journey I through the countryside I watched rolling green hills and small villages pass by, which helped me relax and stop scrolling on my phone.

✓ For instance, on a recent bus journey through the countryside I watched rolling green hills and small villages pass by, which helped me relax and stop scrolling on my phone.

The original sentence includes an extra pronoun 'I' and a misplaced word 'through' causing incorrect sentence structure (past tense narration is fine). Remove the extraneous 'I' so the phrase 'on a recent bus journey through the countryside' correctly modifies the main clause. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch extra or misplaced words.

× For instance, last summer I photographed A dramatic sunset over the mountains, though I limited myself to a few shots so I could enjoy the experience rather than spend the whole time behind the camera.

✓ For instance, last summer I photographed a dramatic sunset over the mountains, though I limited myself to a few shots so I could enjoy the experience rather than spend the whole time behind the camera.

The word 'A' is incorrectly capitalized in the middle of the sentence. Use lowercase 'a' as the indefinite article. Capitalization errors can distract readers; ensure only proper nouns and sentence-initial words are capitalized.

× That's a really tough choice, I have to say, But recently I prefer the mountains.

✓ That's a really tough choice, I have to say, but recently I have preferred the mountains.

The sentence mixes present simple 'prefer' with 'recently', which typically pairs with present perfect to indicate a change or trend up to now. Also 'But' is incorrectly capitalized after a comma; use lowercase 'but'. Use 'have preferred' to show the recent preference continuing into the present.

× I love the fresh crisper, the quiet and the sense of being surrounded by the nature.

✓ I love the fresh crisp air, the quiet, and the sense of being surrounded by nature.

'Fresh crisper' is incorrect: 'crisper' is comparative and doesn't fit; the intended noun is 'crisp air'. Also 'the nature' is incorrect article usage; use 'nature' without 'the'. Add commas for clarity and parallel structure. Suggestion: use noun phrases ('crisp air') and avoid unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns.

× For example, hiking to a Ridge and looking out over the valley feels incredibly peaceful, whereas the sea can be more crowded and noisy.

✓ For example, hiking to a ridge and looking out over the valley feels incredibly peaceful, whereas the sea can be more crowded and noisy.

'Ridge' is incorrectly capitalized; common nouns in mid-sentence should be lowercase. Use 'a ridge'. Capitalization error; also ensure articles match noun usage ('a ridge').