Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Clarify meaning, correct word choice and grammar, reduce hesitation and redundancy, and structure more directly. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and reason), then add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incorrect words like 'buy bus'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I feel less comfortable on buses than in cars. For example, on a long bus journey I watch the changing landscapes to distract myself and relax.

Gợi ý: Give a direct concise answer, correct repetitions and awkward phrasing, and support with a specific reason. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to make your response coherent and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I usually don't take photos unless something unusual appears, because I can easily find similar images online. However, if I see a rare scene, I will take a picture to keep a personal memory.

Gợi ý: This answer is personal and engaging but needs cleaner grammar, fewer hesitations, and one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give distinct reasons with linking words such as 'because' and 'for example.' Remove repetition and filler phrases.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I have loved marine life since childhood and feel a strong emotional connection to the ocean. For example, I even have a small tattoo of a wave on my wrist to remind me of that connection.

× I buy bus because when I'm traveling with a bus I usually don't feel as much comfortable as traveling by a car, so I just feel like I need to distract myself from the outer, umm effects.

✓ I take the bus because when I'm traveling by bus I usually don't feel as comfortable as when traveling by car, so I feel like I need to distract myself from the outside effects.

The student used 'buy bus' instead of the correct verb phrase 'take the bus' and omitted articles and prepositions. 'Buy' is incorrect for using transport; use 'take' or 'travel by'. 'A bus' and 'a car' are general references; commonly say 'by bus' and 'by car' or 'the bus/the car' depending on context. 'As much comfortable' is ungrammatical — use 'as comfortable' or 'as comfortable as'. 'Outer' is incorrect in this context; use 'outside' or 'external'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for transport (take/travel by), use comparative structure 'as ... as', and use 'outside' for external surroundings.

× So I generally look at the window at the scenery when I'm traveling with the bus.

✓ So I generally look out of the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus.

Using 'look at the window' is incorrect; native speakers 'look out of' or simply 'look out the window'. Also 'traveling with the bus' is wrong; use 'traveling by bus'. Suggestion: use 'look out (of) the window' and 'by bus' for transport method.

× No, if there is not not an extraordinary thing going on, I do not, because nowadays we can easily access like the pictures and like sceneries with our phones and with Internet, so I do not prefer.

✓ No, if there is not an extraordinary thing going on, I do not, because nowadays we can easily access pictures and scenery with our phones and the Internet, so I prefer not to.

Double 'not not' is a repetition error. 'Access' is correct but 'like' fillers should be removed. 'Sceneries' is uncountable; use 'scenery'. 'With Internet' should be 'with the Internet'. 'I do not prefer' is awkward; use 'I prefer not to'. Suggestion: remove filler words, fix double negatives, use correct article 'the Internet', and treat 'scenery' as uncountable.

× I prefer the sea because since I was a little kid, I was really into sea and sea creatures.

✓ I prefer the sea because since I was a little kid I have really been into the sea and sea creatures.

When talking about a continued preference from childhood to present, present perfect 'have been' is more appropriate than past 'was'. Also 'into sea' needs the article 'the sea'. Suggestion: use 'the sea' and present perfect to show continuing interest.

× And I also have a tattoo on my wrist about how beautiful is the ocean and sea.

✓ I also have a tattoo on my wrist that shows how beautiful the ocean and the sea are.

The original uses an incorrect clause order 'about how beautiful is the ocean and sea' which is a question word order embedded in a statement. Use a relative clause 'that shows' and normal subject-verb order 'the ocean and the sea are'. Also include articles 'the ocean' and 'the sea'. Suggestion: use correct clause structure and article use.

× It just I feel, I feel, I just feel like there's a deep connection.

✓ I just feel like there's a deep connection.

Redundant repetition 'I feel, I feel' is disfluent and unnecessary. Streamline to a single clause 'I just feel like there's a deep connection.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and pauses in spoken/written responses.