Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Oh, that is very interesting question. And yes, I always look out the window at the scenery when traveling by car and sometimes by bus. I like sunsets especially and I always take photos of sunsets. Uh, but uh, some people don't understand.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Of course, and then I post it on my Instagram account and I don't know, but I see a beautiful way when I see a sunsets, when I travel by bus or by car or sometimes by train.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
Oh, I prefer both of them. I like swimming and at the same time I like see a beauty of mountains.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Старайтесь давать более сжатый и естественный ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных примера без заполнителей («uh», «and») и не повторяйте одну идею несколько раз. Улучшите связность с помощью простых связок (for example, especially, however). Также избегайте фраз типа «some people don't understand» без пояснения — лучше объяснить, почему это важно для вас.
Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car, and sometimes on the bus. I especially enjoy watching sunsets because the colors change quickly, so I often take photos to capture them. For example, last month I stopped at a viewpoint to photograph a spectacular sunset.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 66.0Gợi ý: Сделайте ответ более чётким и логичным: начните с прямого ответа, затем поясните цель (например, делиться с друзьями или хранить воспоминания) и приведите конкретный пример. Уберите нерелевантные фразы («I don't know») и исправьте грамматические ошибки (например, «a sunsets»).
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery and post them on my Instagram to share with friends. I usually photograph sunsets or interesting landscapes when I travel by car, bus or train because the light makes the scene look dramatic. For example, I recently posted a photo of a mountain valley that received many likes.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Отвечайте сразу и конкретно: можно выбрать одно предпочтение или сказать, что нравятся оба, но объяснить причину для каждого. Используйте связки (because, while, and) и корректную грамматику (например, «see the beauty of the mountains»). Добавьте один конкретный пример или сравнение.
Ví dụ: I enjoy both, because the sea is perfect for swimming and relaxing, while the mountains are ideal for hiking and enjoying nature. For instance, I prefer the sea in summer for swimming, but in autumn I prefer the mountains for long walks.
× Oh, that is very interesting question.
✓ Oh, that is a very interesting question.
Article error: missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very interesting question'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Add 'a' to make it grammatical. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable noun phrases: 'that is a very interesting question.'
× And yes, I always look out the window at the scenery when traveling by car and sometimes by bus.
✓ And yes, I always look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by car and sometimes by bus.
Preposition and spelling: 'look out the window' is commonly 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' (both acceptable), but 'look out of the window' is clearer here; also maintain British spelling 'travelling' to match 'travelling' in question. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window' or keep consistency in spelling.
× I like sunsets especially and I always take photos of sunsets.
✓ I especially like sunsets and I always take photos of them.
Pronoun and word order: 'sunsets especially' has awkward word order; place 'especially' before the verb or phrase. Use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition of 'sunsets'. Suggestion: Move adverb 'especially' and replace repeated noun with 'them'.
× Uh, but uh, some people don't understand.
✓ But some people don't understand.
Redundancy and filler words: Multiple 'uh' fillers are unnecessary in written answers. Remove fillers and keep the sentence concise. Suggestion: Omit 'uh' and begin with 'But'.
× Of course, and then I post it on my Instagram account and I don't know, but I see a beautiful way when I see a sunsets, when I travel by bus or by car or sometimes by train.
✓ Of course, I post them on my Instagram account, and I don't know, but I see beautiful scenes when I see sunsets while I travel by bus, by car, or sometimes by train.
Plural agreement and article use and word choice: 'post it' should be 'post them' to match plural 'photos'. 'A sunsets' is ungrammatical—use 'sunsets' (plural) or 'a sunset' (singular). 'Beautiful way' is incorrect collocation; use 'beautiful scenes'. Also simplify clauses and maintain consistent tense. Suggestion: Use plural pronouns for photos, correct collocations, and streamline sentence structure.
× Oh, I prefer both of them.
✓ Oh, I prefer both.
Pronoun redundancy: 'both of them' is acceptable but unnecessary; 'both' suffices after 'prefer'. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer both' for conciseness.
× I like swimming and at the same time I like see a beauty of mountains.
✓ I like swimming and at the same time I like to see the beauty of mountains.
Verb form and article use: 'like see' is incorrect; use 'like to see' or 'like seeing'. 'a beauty of mountains' is ungrammatical; use 'the beauty of the mountains' or 'the beauty of mountains'. Suggestion: Use infinitive or -ing form ('like to see' or 'like seeing') and include proper article 'the' before 'beauty' with 'mountains'.