Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/capitalization errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I always sit next to the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I often watch commuters heading to work, which helps me plan my day and makes the journey feel shorter.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation sounds and use clearer vocabulary. Give one concise reason and one specific example, linked logically. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the window because I enjoy capturing interesting scenes. For instance, last month I photographed a colourful sunset over the fields, which reminded me to slow down and appreciate the view.

Gợi ý: Avoid filler words and be specific about preference. Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then one reason and a brief example or result, using a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I find the beach more relaxing. For example, I enjoy taking photos of the shoreline and listening to the waves, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Absolutely. Every time When I commute by bus or car I usually choose to sit next to the window and I can see people are going to work like me.

✓ Absolutely. Every time I commute by bus or car, I usually choose to sit next to the window, and I can see people going to work like me.

The sentence has awkward capitalization and structure. 'When' after 'Every time' is redundant; use one temporal phrase. Add commas to separate clauses. Use 'people going to work' (a reduced relative clause) rather than 'people are going to work' to make the sentence flow and keep present continuous appropriate for habitual scenes. Suggestion: remove redundant words and punctuate clauses clearly.

× Yes, I do umm, when I sit next to the window, I'm quite like, uh, capture at the moment. So, uh, everything I can see or especially some, uh, beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, I do. Umm, when I sit next to the window, I quite like capturing the moment. So everything I can see, especially any beautiful scenery, I photograph.

Multiple issues: 'I'm quite like, uh, capture at the moment' mixes structures. After 'like' use a verb + -ing form ('like capturing'). 'Capture at the moment' is nonnative; 'capture the moment' is idiomatic. 'Everything I can see or especially some beautiful scenery' is fragmented; revise to a clear object (e.g., 'especially any beautiful scenery, I photograph'). Also add sentence breaks and punctuation for clarity.

× Umm, I like both, but umm, I prefer the scene more because uh, I love working and uh, taking photos on the beach and umm, I feel soothing when I listen to the waves.

✓ Umm, I like both, but I prefer the sea more because I love walking and taking photos on the beach, and I feel soothed when I listen to the waves.

Several problems: 'prefer the scene' is incorrect—should be 'the sea' (word choice). 'I love working' is likely meant as 'walking' or another activity; corrected to 'walking' to match beach context. 'I feel soothing' wrongly uses an adjective where a past participle or adjective describing the subject is needed; correct is 'I feel soothed' to express the feeling caused by the waves. Also remove extra fillers and improve clause connections.