Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
To be honest, we're not in traveling by bus or car. I prefer relaxing, sleeping because I like, I prefer to enjoy the place that I'm going to explore.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Of course, that is one of the things that I enjoy too, so much when I come to when the cars stop and I can go out and take pictures about the landscape.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
I like both but it depends on the season of the year. Sometimes I like to go to the mountains because I like hiking, but sometimes I I prefer only go to the beach swimming and relaxing with the sound of the waves.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g. 'we're not in traveling' is incorrect). Use simple past or present forms correctly and keep answers to no more than five sentences.
Ví dụ: Not usually. When I travel by car or bus I often prefer to relax or sleep so I can arrive feeling refreshed. However, if the landscape looks interesting I will look out the window and sometimes take photos.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and use linking words (e.g. 'so', 'when', 'because'). Correct common collocations: say 'take pictures of the landscape' not 'about the landscape'. Reduce hesitations and redundant phrases.
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of the scenery, especially when the bus or car stops at a viewpoint, because it lets me capture the landscape and remember the trip.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Give a clear direct answer and then explain with specific reasons and linking words. Fix grammar issues: 'it depends on the season' is fine, but say 'I like the mountains for hiking' or 'I prefer the beach for swimming and relaxing'. Avoid repeating words and keep sentences concise.
Ví dụ: I like both, but it depends on the season. For example, in cooler months I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking, whereas in summer I prefer the sea for swimming and relaxing to the sound of the waves.
× To be honest, we're not in traveling by bus or car.
✓ To be honest, we don't usually travel by bus or car.
The original uses an incorrect continuous form and preposition ('in traveling'). The meaning requires the simple present 'don't usually travel' to describe a habitual action. Use 'travel by' not 'in traveling by'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and the correct verb-preposition collocation.
× I prefer relaxing, sleeping because I like, I prefer to enjoy the place that I'm going to explore.
✓ I prefer relaxing and sleeping because I like to enjoy the place I'm going to explore.
The sentence repeats 'I prefer' and uses a comma splice. Combine activities with 'and' and use the infinitive 'to enjoy' after 'like'. Remove redundant phrase and unnecessary commas. Maintain consistent verb forms.
× Of course, that is one of the things that I enjoy too, so much when I come to when the cars stop and I can go out and take pictures about the landscape.
✓ Of course, that's one of the things I enjoy so much when I arrive, when the cars stop and I can go out and take pictures of the landscape.
Problems: awkward phrasing 'come to when' and incorrect preposition 'about' with 'take pictures'. Use 'arrive' and 'take pictures of'. Also streamline 'that is' to 'that's' and place 'so much' correctly. Keep consistent verb tenses.
× I like both but it depends on the season of the year.
✓ I like both, but it depends on the season.
Phrase 'season of the year' is redundant; 'season' suffices. Add a comma before 'but' to join clauses. Use simple present 'depends' to express general truth.
× Sometimes I like to go to the mountains because I like hiking, but sometimes I I prefer only go to the beach swimming and relaxing with the sound of the waves.
✓ Sometimes I like to go to the mountains because I enjoy hiking, but other times I prefer to go to the beach to swim and relax to the sound of the waves.
Multiple issues: repeated 'I', missing 'to' before 'go' and incorrect verb forms. Use gerund/infinitive appropriately: 'enjoy hiking', 'prefer to go', and 'to swim and relax' or 'go swimming and relax'. Also 'other times' is clearer than 'sometimes' twice.