Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and use linking words to add one or two specific details. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. For example, say you usually travel by plane, but when you do take a bus or car you enjoy looking at the clouds and colors because they feel peaceful and inspiring.

Ví dụ: I don’t usually travel by car or bus because I fly most of the time. However, when I do travel on the road I enjoy looking at the clouds and the changing blue sky, because their shapes and colors look peaceful and inspiring.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer: give a direct yes/no topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example. Remove hesitations and redundant adjectives; choose one or two precise descriptors. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the window, especially at sunrise and sunset. I like those moments because the light is warm and dramatic, which makes the scenes look unique and creates great memories.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'the sea has' not 'have') and avoid vague or awkward phrases. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect reason.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the seascape feels more expansive and calming. For example, I enjoy walking along the shore and listening to the waves, which helps me relax and think clearly.

× I don't, I don't usually, uh, travel by a car or by a bus, but I usually travel by the airplane.

✓ I don't, I don't usually travel by car or by bus, but I usually travel by plane.

Use of articles with means of transport: English normally omits the definite/indefinite article when speaking about general means of transport (travel by car, by bus, by plane). 'the airplane' is incorrect for the general statement; use 'plane' or 'an airplane' only for a specific airplane. Remove extra commas for natural flow.

× But I find it's also interesting and so beautiful to look out how the clouds shaped and those beautiful, uh, blue, uh, blue color.

✓ But I find it interesting and so beautiful to look at how the clouds are shaped and their beautiful blue color.

The original mixes tense and incorrect verb forms. Use present simple 'I find' and 'to look at' as the correct verb + preposition. 'how the clouds shaped' needs passive or present continuous: 'how the clouds are shaped' or 'how the clouds shape'. Also 'those... blue color' should be 'their beautiful blue color' to show possession and correct noun phrase order.

× Yes, especially in sunset and sunrise.

✓ Yes, especially at sunset and at sunrise.

Use preposition 'at' with 'sunset' and 'sunrise' for times of day. Also the original lacks articles/prepositions; no past tense required here but the main error is preposition; categorized under present tense/time issues but matches 'Incorrect use of prepositions' as well; here corrected to 'at'.

× I feel it's so amazing and aesthetic and unique moment to take it, uh, this type of photo, it will be a good uh, memory.

✓ I feel it's such an amazing, aesthetic, and unique moment to take this type of photo; it will be a good memory.

Use 'such a/an' before a noun phrase: 'such an amazing... moment'. 'this type of photo' should directly follow 'take' without extra 'it'. Punctuation and word order adjusted for clarity. Also 'aesthetic' is an adjective and should be in the adjective list before 'moment'.

× In my opinion, I think mountains are beautiful, but not as much as the sea. The sea have a beautiful and unique at the same time a breathtaking view.

✓ In my opinion, I think mountains are beautiful, but not as much as the sea. The sea has a beautiful, unique, and at the same time breathtaking view.

Subject-verb agreement: 'sea' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Also reorder adjectives for natural flow: 'beautiful, unique, and at the same time breathtaking view.'

× All of us here in my home like to enjoy this and also you.

✓ All of us here at my home like to enjoy it, and you do too.

Pronoun and preposition corrections: use 'at my home' (or 'in my home') and refer to 'this' as 'it' for the scenery or activity. 'and also you' is unnatural; 'and you do too' is the correct way to invite agreement. Adjusted word order for natural English.