Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words (for example, because, so, while) to make your answer coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love looking out of the window when I travel because it helps me relax and think. For example, while I watch the passing landscape I often plan my week or remember good times with friends, which makes the journey enjoyable.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with a clear reason and an example. Reduce hesitation words and informal phrases like “can you understand what I mean?”. Use a linking word (because, so) to connect your reason.

Ví dụ: No, I usually don't take photos from the car window because the images rarely capture what I actually see. For example, reflections on the glass and motion blur often spoil the picture, so I prefer to simply enjoy the view.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear preference sentence and give specific reasons. Correct grammar (e.g., "I am on the national ski team"), avoid short fragmented sentences, and use linking words (however, although) to contrast opinions. Provide one concise supporting detail and one brief contrasting point.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I am on the national ski team in Turkey and I enjoy mountain sports. However, I also like the sea for relaxing in summer, even though I dislike eating fish.

× Yeah, yes, actually it's my favorite thing when I was traveling, umm, I always use my handphones and looking the outside and dreaming and thinking my life, thinking my career and thinking my best friend, thinking my good friends.

✓ Yes, actually it's my favorite thing when I travel; I always use my phone and look out the window, dreaming and thinking about my life, my career, my best friend and my good friends.

The student mixes past and present tense ('when I was traveling' with habitual actions). Use simple present or simple past consistently depending on meaning. For a habitual preference, use simple present: 'when I travel' and 'I always use' rather than 'when I was traveling'. Also correct verb forms: 'looking the outside' should be 'look out the window' and 'handphones' -> 'phone'. Add 'about' after 'thinking' to link objects. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for habits (simple present), use correct verb patterns and prepositions.

× I always use my handphones and looking the outside and dreaming and thinking my life, thinking my career and thinking my best friend, thinking my good friends.

✓ I always use my phone and look out the window, dreaming and thinking about my life, my career, my best friend and my good friends.

After 'always' with 'use' the following action should be in base form ('look') not '-ing' unless linked with a conjunction or continuous structure. Also 'thinking my life' needs 'think about'. Suggestion: sequence parallel verbs (use and look), use gerund for simultaneous actions when appropriate (dreaming), and include 'about' after 'think'.

× So the mountains has a my heart.

✓ So the mountains have my heart.

Subject 'mountains' is plural, so the verb must be plural ('have' not 'has'). Also 'a my heart' is incorrect article/pronoun order; use 'have my heart' or 'are close to my heart'. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and omit incorrect articles.

× So the mountains has a my heart.

✓ So the mountains have my heart.

The phrase 'a my heart' incorrectly uses an indefinite article before a possessive pronoun. Possessives do not take articles. Remove 'a' and use the correct possessive structure. Also ensure subject-verb agreement as above.

× Actually, no, because I can't, umm, I try to take photos but umm, I can't uh, see the photo which I see in the real life.

✓ Actually, no, because I can't. I try to take photos but I can't capture the scene the same way I see it in real life.

Mixes present simple and continuous awkwardly and uses 'see the photo which I see in the real life' which is unidiomatic. Use 'capture the scene' or 'take a photo that matches what I see in real life'. Keep tense consistent (present simple) for general statements. Suggestion: use 'can't capture' or 'can't take a photo that matches what I see'.

× And this is also my favorite activity.

✓ This is also one of my favorite activities.

Original sentence is understandable but more natural to use 'one of my favorite activities' to indicate it's among several. Pronoun use 'this' is okay but adding 'one of' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use plural 'activities' when implying multiple favorites.

× Actually I prefer mountains because I'm on national scare in Turkey team, so I love the sport.

✓ Actually I prefer the mountains because I'm on the national ski team in Turkey, so I love the sport.

The phrase 'national scare in Turkey team' is ungrammatical and likely a pronunciation error for 'national ski team'. 'Prefer mountains' is fine but usually 'the mountains' is used. Correct sentence structure: 'I'm on the national ski team in Turkey.' Ensure word order and articles are correct. Suggestion: use 'the' before 'mountains' and correct noun 'ski'.

× But uh, for the sea. I also love it for the summer actually, but umm, I hate fish.

✓ But I also love the sea in summer, actually, although I hate fish.

Original has sentence fragments ('But uh, for the sea.') and awkward pronoun placement 'I also love it for the summer'. Combine into a single sentence and use 'the sea' and 'in summer'. Use 'although' to contrast with 'I hate fish'. Suggestion: avoid fragments and keep pronoun references clear.