Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct mistakes (e.g. "scenery" singular, remove repeated fragments) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually keep the window closed when I travel by car or bus because looking outside makes me feel dizzy and nauseous. Therefore, I often sleep during the journey to feel more comfortable. As a result, I don't feel like I'm missing anything important.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence and combine repetitive fragments. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and give a specific example of when you take photos. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid incomplete sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window, but only when the vehicle is stopped because I want sharp pictures. For example, I often photograph coastal views or interesting buildings when we pause at viewpoints so the image is clear.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear comparative sentence (I prefer X to Y), correct grammar (prefer X to Y), and give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and fix awkward wording ("easily disgusted by insects").

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I find beaches more relaxing and they suit my idea of unwinding. I also dislike hiking since insects bother me, so being by the sea makes me feel calmer and more refreshed.

× When traveling by bus or car, I actually prefer to keep my windows closed as I do not want to see the sceneries outside.

✓ When traveling by bus or car, I actually prefer to keep my windows closed because I do not want to see the scenery outside.

Use of 'sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun in English. Also replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection. Suggestion: treat 'scenery' as uncountable and avoid pluralizing it.

× It makes me feel dizzy and nauseous.

✓ Looking at the scenery makes me feel dizzy and nauseous.

The original sentence is grammatically correct but lacks a clear subject referring to what causes the feeling. Adding 'Looking at the scenery' clarifies the subject and improves coherence with previous sentence.

× I prefer to sleep inside the car when traveling it the I don't feel that I am missing out on anything when I.

✓ I prefer to sleep inside the car when traveling because I don't feel that I am missing out on anything.

Original sentence has word order and extra fragments ('it the I' and trailing 'when I'). This is a sentence structure error. Correction removes the fragments and connects clauses with 'because'. Suggestion: keep clauses concise and ensure pronouns refer clearly.

× When there is an opportunity for me to take a photo of a scenery outside the window, yes I do.

✓ When there is an opportunity for me to take a photo of the scenery outside the window, I do.

Use 'the scenery' (uncountable) rather than 'a scenery'. Also the original phrase 'yes I do' is conversationally fine but redundant; streamlined version is clearer. 'There is' is acceptable here but paired with correct noun form.

× I do take a photo especially when the car is not moving as I do not want to take a photo that is blurry or not clear.

✓ I take a photo especially when the car is not moving because I do not want a blurry or unclear picture.

Stylistic improvement: avoid repeating 'take a photo' and use adjectives 'blurry' and 'unclear' modifying 'picture'. Also prefer 'because' for reason. Verb form is adjusted for natural phrasing.

× When there is a clear opportunity for me to take a photo.

✓ I take a photo when there is a clear opportunity.

Original is a sentence fragment missing a main clause. Correction completes the thought by making it a full sentence. Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× I definitely prefer the sea than the mountains.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea to the mountains.

Use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer X than Y'. This is a common preposition usage rule in English.

× I do not like hiking so much as I am this easily disgusted by the insects.

✓ I do not like hiking much because I am easily disgusted by insects.

Original contains extra word 'this' and incorrect phrasing 'so much as'. Remove 'this' and use 'because' to link reason. Also 'insects' does not need 'the' unless referring to specific insects.

× While the sea makes me feel at peace and calm, I feel more relaxed and refreshed when I am at the sea.

✓ While the sea makes me feel peaceful and calm, I feel more relaxed and refreshed when I am at the sea.

Replace 'at peace' with 'peaceful' to match adjectives 'calm' and keep parallel structure. 'At the sea' is acceptable, but 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside' may sound more natural. This mainly refines adjective choice and prepositional naturalness.