Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeated words and filler phrases, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct minor grammar and word choice (e.g., use "photography" or "a photography enthusiast" instead of "photaholic"). Keep the response under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love photography and often take pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I always photograph landscapes because I enjoy capturing aesthetic scenes, and then I post a few of my favorite shots on social media.

Gợi ý: Make the response more coherent and avoid repetition: begin with a clear preference sentence, use linking words to contrast reasons, and give one or two specific examples of rural scenery. Reduce filler words and fix grammar (e.g., "riverside valleys" and remove extra 'just'). Keep within five sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more scenic. For instance, in villages you can see mountain slopes and peaceful riversides, whereas urban areas are often congested with heavy traffic and air pollution.

Gợi ý: Be more concise and specific: state your preference directly, then give a short reason and specific examples of places. Avoid hedging phrases like "to be honest" and repeated phrases. Use linking words to organise the answer (e.g., "because", "for example").

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I find many local landscapes truly mesmerizing. For example, I often visit Goa for its beaches, and Maharashtra and Kerala for their lush hills and backwaters.

× Yes, I'm a photaholic person, so I really like clicking pictures a lot.

✓ Yes, I'm a photography enthusiast, so I really like taking pictures a lot.

The word 'photaholic' is informal/nonstandard. Use 'photography enthusiast' or 'photophile'. 'Clicking pictures' is acceptable in spoken English but 'taking pictures' is more natural and standard. Replace informal terms to improve clarity and grammatical appropriateness.

× So it doesn't matter whether it's me or the nature.

✓ So it doesn't matter whether it's me or nature.

'the nature' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable noun here and does not require the definite article 'the'. Removing 'the' corrects noun usage and maintains agreement with 'it doesn't matter'.

× So I really like when I ever go anywhere, I always click the pictures for an aesthetic view and just put it on, post it on these stories.

✓ So whenever I go anywhere, I always take pictures of aesthetic views and post them on my stories.

Problems: incorrect word order ('when I ever go' should be 'whenever I go'), redundant verbs ('click the pictures' -> 'take pictures'), awkward phrasing 'put it on, post it on these stories'. Combine actions clearly: 'take pictures' and 'post them on my stories'. This fixes sentence structure and pronoun reference.

× I prefer views in rural areas because in rural areas they are always quiet and when we just visit the village we just see all the natural places in the mountains, the Riverside valley, everything, all while in urban areas it's always congested, a constant traffic and so much air pollution and.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are always quiet, and when we visit a village we see natural places like mountains, riverside valleys and so on, whereas urban areas are always congested, with constant traffic and much air pollution.

Multiple issues: pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and causes ambiguity; repetition of 'in rural areas' can be reduced; 'the Riverside valley' incorrectly capitalized and article use; 'a constant traffic' should be 'constant traffic' (no article), and sentence ended with 'and.' needs completion. Rewriting improves subject-verb agreement, article use, and clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer views in my own country, not all of the views, but there are some views in my country that are so mesmerizing and I really like to visit there a lot, especially in Goa and also in Maharashtra and Kerala.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in my own country; not all views, but some are so mesmerizing and I like to visit them a lot, especially in Goa, Maharashtra and Kerala.

Issues: 'visit there' is incorrect because 'visit' takes a direct object (visit them/visit those places) or 'go there'. Also 'not all of the views' is wordy; use 'not all views'. Commas and conjunctions can be tightened. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'views'.

× I really like visiting.

✓ I really like visiting them.

Sentence 'I really like visiting.' is incomplete because 'visiting' requires an object or context. Add 'them' to refer back to places (or specify 'those places'). This fixes the gerund's object requirement.