Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và rút ngắn câu cho tự nhiên hơn. Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể hơn để minh hoạ. Ví dụ, thay vì nói chung chung như "natural beauty" hoặc "meaningful moments", hãy nêu ví dụ cụ thể (hoàng hôn, cây cầu, khu chợ). Sử dụng liên từ như "for example" hoặc "such as" để làm rõ ý.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking photographs, especially of scenic views. For example, I often capture sunsets over the sea and quiet mountain trails because they show the most beautiful colors and peaceful atmosphere.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ từ "views" nhiều lần) và làm câu mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng cấu trúc so sánh rõ ràng. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc lý do chi tiết (âm thanh, không khí, không gian) để tăng tính thuyết phục. Sử dụng liên từ như "because", "which makes" hợp lý hơn.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural scenery such as rolling mountains and quiet fields. This peaceful environment makes me feel relaxed, unlike the noisy and crowded atmosphere of cities.

Gợi ý: Cải thiện: Giảm sử dụng ngôn ngữ thân mật như "you know" và sửa lỗi lặp từ/grammatical errors ("a lot of many", "I've I haven't"). Nên bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: lịch sử, phong cảnh, văn hoá) và kết bằng dự định hoặc ví dụ về nơi chưa khám phá. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

Ví dụ: I prefer the views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes and culture. For instance, I love exploring coastal cliffs and traditional villages, and there are many places I still want to visit and photograph.

× Yes, I definitely like photographing, especially taking photos of different views.

✓ Yes, I definitely like photographing, especially taking photos of different views.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses verb + -ing forms to express preferences. Keep using gerunds after like to talk about hobbies or preferences.

× I enjoy capturing specific moments like the natural beauty of the landscape and meaningful moments with people around me.

✓ I enjoy capturing specific moments, such as the natural beauty of the landscape and meaningful moments with people around me.

Use of 'like' to list examples is acceptable but 'such as' is more formal and clearer. The present tense 'enjoy capturing' is correct, so only stylistic improvement is suggested.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the natural scenery like mountains and views.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the natural scenery, such as mountains and open vistas.

The original sentence repeats 'views' causing redundancy. Replacing 'like' with 'such as' and changing the second 'views' to 'open vistas' removes repetition and improves clarity.

× It makes me feel calm and relaxed, which is very different from the busy and crowded atmosphere of cities.

✓ It makes me feel calm and relaxed, which is very different from the busy and crowded atmosphere of cities.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change required; present simple appropriately contrasts feelings about rural and urban areas.

× I prefer views here and you know, I feel really connected to the natural beauty of my country.

✓ I prefer views here; I feel really connected to the natural beauty of my country.

Original is understandable but 'and you know' is conversational filler. Using a semicolon or a short pause improves fluency. Present tense 'prefer' and 'feel' are correct.

× I'm kind of proud of it because there are a lot of many beautiful places that I've I haven't explored yet.

✓ I'm kind of proud of it because there are many beautiful places that I haven't explored yet.

The phrase 'a lot of many' is redundant and incorrect; choose either 'a lot of' or 'many'. Also remove the duplicated 'I'. Use present perfect 'haven't explored' to indicate experiences up to now; this is correct. The corrected sentence fixes redundancy and the extra pronoun.