Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 어휘 정확성을 개선하세요. 특히 동사 형태와 관사 사용, 문장 연결을 고쳐 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 말하세요. 예: 'I frequently take pictures of places around me, such as the walk to school or on my way home.' 또는 '...when I visit new places.'처럼 구체적인 예를 넣고 문장을 2~3개 이내로 유지하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take pictures of places around me. For example, I like photographing the walk to school and the route home because I notice interesting details I might forget otherwise.

Gợi ý: 명사 단수/복수와 동사 시제·수 일치를 확인하세요. 또한 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 말하세요. 예: 'I prefer urban areas because they offer a variety of architecture and busy streets, which I find inspiring.'처럼 구체적 이유와 감정을 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer urban areas because they offer a variety of architecture and busy streets. For instance, the mix of old and new buildings and the bustling cafés give me inspiration and a sense of freedom.

Gợi ý: 표현을 더 자연스럽게 고치고 중복된 표현을 제거하세요. 'fresh'와 'feel free' 같은 표현 대신 구체적 감정·이유를 제시하세요. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 사용하세요. 예: 'I prefer views abroad because the different architecture and culture make me feel refreshed and curious.'

Ví dụ: I prefer views in other countries because different architecture and cultures make me feel refreshed. For example, seeing unfamiliar buildings and local customs often sparks my curiosity and excitement.

× Yes, I frequently takes take pictures around me like attending my school or going back to my home or the way to get the new fresh places.

✓ Yes, I frequently take pictures around me, such as when I attend school, go home, or travel to new places.

The verb 'take' should be used with 'I' without the -s ending (third person singular error). Remove the duplicated 'takes' and 'take'. Improve prepositions and phrasing: use 'when I attend school' and 'go home' instead of 'attending my school' and 'going back to my home'. Use 'travel to new places' or 'visit new places' instead of 'the way to get the new fresh places' for natural English.

× I prefer views in urban area because it offer a complex view.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they offer complex scenery.

'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match 'views' and general preference (singular/plural issue). The verb 'offer' must agree with the plural subject 'areas' (subject-verb agreement linked to plural). 'A complex view' is awkward; use 'complex scenery' or 'complex views'.

× The city consists of many buildings and streets and that complexity allow me to feel free.

✓ The city consists of many buildings and streets, and that complexity allows me to feel free.

'Complexity' is a singular noun, so the verb must be 'allows' (subject-verb agreement error). Add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I prefer views in other countries because I can feel fresh in exotic surrounding, especially new buildings and fresh culture.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I feel refreshed in exotic surroundings, especially with new buildings and a different culture.

Use 'feel refreshed' (adjective) instead of 'feel fresh' for natural English. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings'. 'Fresh culture' is unnatural; use 'a different culture' or 'new cultural experiences'. Also adjust articles: 'a different culture'.

× Allow me to feel free.

✓ They allow me to feel free.

'Allow me to feel free' lacks a clear subject; as written it is a fragment. Make 'They allow me to feel free' referring back to 'new buildings and a different culture', or combine with the previous sentence: '..., which allows me to feel free.' This fixes the sentence structure and clarifies the subject.