Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar, avoid fillers (e.g., “uh”), and use clearer phrasing and sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Pay attention to verb agreement and natural collocations (e.g., “sunset” not “the sunset has pretty much amazing colors to give”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking pictures because every scene can tell a story. For example, city skylines at sunset often display warm, dramatic colors that I enjoy capturing, and I also take close-up shots of flowers during my evening walks to highlight their textures and details.

Gợi ý: Correct unclear phrases and grammar errors, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” properly, and give specific sensory details. Fix mistakes such as “saying white feels” and verb forms (“helps calm and refresh”).

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because the landscapes are full of vibrant colours and natural features that soothe me. For example, after a busy week, walking among wide fields and tall trees helps calm and refresh my mind, whereas crowded city streets often feel noisy and stressful.

Gợi ý: Avoid vague phrases and fix word choice errors (e.g., “rug landscapes”). Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific examples and linking words. Use precise vocabulary to describe landscapes and reduce repetition.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of scenery. For instance, we have beautiful coastal areas, rolling plains and dramatic mountain ranges, so I can enjoy diverse landscapes without traveling far.

× For instance, uh, the city skylines on the sunset has pretty much amazing colors to give.

✓ For instance, uh, the city skyline at sunset has pretty much amazing colors to offer.

Subject 'the city skyline' is singular so the verb must be 'has' (which was used) but 'skylines' with 'the' and 'on the sunset' is incorrect. The phrase should be singular 'skyline' with preposition 'at sunset'. Also 'to give' is unnatural; use 'to offer'. Suggestion: match noun number and use correct preposition and collocation: 'the city skyline at sunset has amazing colors to offer.'

× Also the close-ups of flowers when I am off to my evening walk.

✓ Also, I like taking close-ups of flowers when I go on my evening walk.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb that expresses the action. 'When I am off to my evening walk' is unidiomatic; use 'when I go on my evening walk.' Suggestion: include subject and verb ('I like taking') and use natural verb phrase 'go on an evening walk.'

× I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because the landscape is full of vibrant colours and natural features that I find very soothing.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because the landscapes are full of vibrant colours and natural features that I find very soothing.

The noun 'landscape' refers generally to multiple rural scenes here, so plural 'landscapes' fits the comparison with 'areas.' Using plural keeps subject-verb agreement and matches 'rural areas.' Suggestion: use plural when referring to multiple places: 'the landscapes are.'

× For example, after a busy week, saying white feels and tall trees helps calms and refresh my mind, whereas crowded cityscapes often feel noisy and stressful.

✓ For example, after a busy week, seeing white fields and tall trees helps calm and refresh my mind, whereas crowded cityscapes often feel noisy and stressful.

Multiple errors: 'saying' is wrong word; should be 'seeing' (verb perception). 'white feels' is a misspelling of 'white fields.' 'helps calms and refresh' has incorrect verb forms; after 'helps' the verbs should be base form 'calm' and 'refresh' not 'calms.' Also parallelism requires both verbs in base form. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and base verb forms after 'helps.'

× I believe every country is beautiful the way it is and I prefer views of my country over other countries because I feel that my country has a lot to give.

✓ I believe every country is beautiful the way it is, and I prefer views of my country to those of other countries because I feel that my country has a lot to offer.

Use parallel comparison 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'over,' and use 'those of other countries' to avoid repeating 'views.' 'A lot to give' is informal and 'a lot to offer' is the correct collocation. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer ... to ...' and replace 'give' with 'offer.'

× Especially it covers the whole rug landscapes from coastal regions to mountain ranges, which is amazing.

✓ In particular, it covers the whole range of landscapes from coastal regions to mountain ranges, which is amazing.

'Especially' is awkward to start the sentence; 'in particular' is better. 'Whole rug landscapes' contains errors: 'rug' is incorrect; intended 'range.' Phrase should be 'the whole range of landscapes.' Preposition 'from ... to ...' is fine. Suggestion: use 'the whole range of landscapes' and correct introductory word to 'in particular.'