Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and minor grammar errors. Use linking words if adding details.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I bought a small pocket camera last year to capture scenic views. For example, I often photograph sunsets over the ocean and dramatic city skylines, because I enjoy the colors and the atmosphere they convey.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, correct hesitations, and provide specific sensory details and a linking phrase to explain why. Avoid fragmented sentences and filler words.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views, especially beaches, because they feel peaceful. For instance, I enjoy walking along the shoreline and listening to the gentle sound of the waves, which helps me relax and think clearly.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer and then give specific reasons and an example. Eliminate repetitions and improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, tense). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country, the Philippines, because it has many beautiful white-sand beaches. For example, Boracay and Palawan are well preserved and offer calm, peaceful scenery that I find very relaxing.

× I bought a pocketable camera last year for me to capture cinematic scenes and I pretty much love taking pictures of landscapes, cityscapes as well as nature I like.

✓ I bought a pocketable camera last year to capture cinematic scenes, and I pretty much love taking pictures of landscapes, cityscapes, and nature.

Multiple issues: 'for me to capture' is awkward—use infinitive purpose 'to capture'. Missing articles not critical here but sentence had extra phrase 'nature I like' which is ungrammatical and redundant; coordinate items need commas and 'and' before final item. Suggest simplifying and using correct punctuation and conjunctions.

× I prefer uh views from the rural areas because I love going to the beach.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love going to the beach.

Unnecessary filler 'uh' and incorrect preposition 'from the rural areas' sounds odd; use 'in rural areas' and omit 'the' before general 'rural areas'. This fixes sentence structure and makes it natural.

× I love how. I walk, uh, near the shores and feel the fine sounds.

✓ I love walking near the shore and hearing the gentle sounds.

Fragment 'I love how.' is incomplete. Verb forms and nouns are awkward: 'I walk' should be gerund 'walking' after 'love'. 'Near the shores' sounds less natural than 'near the shore' or 'the shores' depending on context; 'feel the fine sounds' is incorrect—sounds are heard, not felt, and 'fine' is not the right adjective; use 'gentle'. Also remove filler 'uh' and fix punctuation.

× I I do like a few recently my country, the Philippines, because as I mentioned, I like going to the beach.

✓ I do like my country, the Philippines, because, as I mentioned, I like going to the beach.

Repeating 'I' and phrase 'a few recently' are incorrect in present-tense context. If intending to say 'recently' it would change meaning; likely they mean generally like their country. Remove extraneous words and keep present simple 'do like' for emphasis. Add commas for clarity.

× Philippines has a lot of white beaches.

✓ The Philippines has a lot of white beaches.

Country name 'Philippines' requires the definite article 'the' when used as a proper noun ('the Philippines'). Adding 'The' fixes the article error and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Most of these beaches are preserved and I like how peaceful and relaxed.

✓ Most of these beaches are preserved, and I like how peaceful and relaxing they are.

Sentence ends with adjective 'relaxed' which incorrectly describes beaches; use 'relaxing' to describe the effect, or 'relaxed' would describe people. Also include the subject 'they' for clarity and combine clauses with a comma and conjunction.