Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
There's of course that in my country there are a lot of beautiful views, so I bought a camera to taking picture in different views.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
Actually I living in rural age area so I love rural area views more because the landscape is more beautiful and natural scenery have me relax and feel refreshed.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
Well, I prefer views in my country more than other countries because I'm living in Vietnam. So Vietnam is a beautiful place for many people. Uh, the atmosphere is very clean and, but I love.
× There's of course that in my country there are a lot of beautiful views, so I bought a camera to taking picture in different views.
✓ Of course, there are a lot of beautiful views in my country, so I bought a camera to take pictures of different views.
The original sentence misused 'There's' and included an unnecessary 'that', causing an incorrect 'there be' construction. Use 'there are' for plural 'a lot of beautiful views'. Also 'to taking' is incorrect; the infinitive 'to take' is required, and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when general. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun, 'to' + base verb, and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.
× Actually I living in rural age area so I love rural area views more because the landscape is more beautiful and natural scenery have me relax and feel refreshed.
✓ Actually, I live in a rural area, so I prefer rural views because the landscape is more beautiful and the natural scenery makes me relax and feel refreshed.
Errors include missing auxiliary for present continuous ('I living' should be 'I live' or 'I am living'); 'rural age area' is incorrect word choice; 'love rural area views more' is awkward—use 'prefer' or 'prefer rural views'; 'natural scenery have me relax' uses plural verb with singular effect and wrong verb: use 'makes me relax' or 'helps me relax'. Suggestions: use simple present 'I live' for habitual facts, correct noun phrases ('a rural area', 'rural views'), and use 'make/helps/makes me relax' for cause-effect with singular 'scenery'.
× Well, I prefer views in my country more than other countries because I'm living in Vietnam.
✓ Well, I prefer views in my country to those in other countries because I live in Vietnam.
Use simple present 'I live' for a general state rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Also comparison structure 'prefer A to B' is standard; 'views in my country more than other countries' is ungrammatical—use 'to those in other countries' to refer back to 'views'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and simple present for facts.
× So Vietnam is a beautiful place for many people.
✓ Vietnam is a beautiful place for many people.
Starting with 'So' is conversational but can be omitted for a cleaner written sentence. The sentence is otherwise grammatical but slightly redundant after the previous sentence; keep concise structure: subject + verb + complement. Suggestion: remove unnecessary discourse marker when giving a direct statement.
× Uh, the atmosphere is very clean and, but I love.
✓ The atmosphere is very clean, and I love it.
The original has filler 'Uh' and a contradictory 'and, but' combination which is incorrect. Also the clause 'I love' lacks an object—'it' (the atmosphere) is needed. Suggestion: remove fillers, use a single conjunction ('and'), and supply the object 'it' for 'love'.