Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence then give two or three specific supporting details. Reduce repetition and filler words, and correct small grammar issues (e.g., use singular/plural consistently and avoid repeated words). Use linking words like “also” or “for example” to connect details.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph food and pastries at new cafés, and I also capture beaches and sunsets because they make me feel happy and relaxed.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two concise reasons with correct grammar. Avoid hesitation and unfinished phrases. Use linking words such as “because” and “so” and give a short example or description to strengthen your point.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views, especially beaches, because they offer beautiful sunrises and sunsets. For instance, the calm sea and soft light feel therapeutic and help me relax.

Gợi ý: Avoid vague generalizations and fillers like “umm.” Give a clear reason and, if possible, one specific example of what you like about other countries’ views. Keep answers to a maximum of five sentences and use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

Ví dụ: To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because they often have more varied landscapes and architecture. For example, I enjoy seeing historic European streets and dramatic mountain scenery that I don't often find in the Philippines.

× 'Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially new places, the food I eat and the new UMM like pastries I try, cafes I went to as well as the beaches and the sunsets and sunrises I I discover just gives me happiness.'

✓ 'Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially new places, the food I eat, the pastries I try, the cafes I visit, as well as beaches and the sunsets and sunrises I discover; they give me happiness.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: The original sentence has a repeated word "I" and uses singular verb "gives" with a compound plural subject (beaches, sunsets and sunrises). Also "UMM like pastries" is unclear and conversational filler; "cafes I went to" is informal past when referring generally so use present tense "visit". Suggest breaking or punctuating the long run-on sentence and ensuring plural subjects take plural verbs. Improvement: remove filler, use parallel structure for listed items, and match verb number to subject.'

× 'I prefer views in rural areas, especially the beach, because it offers beautiful sunsets and sunrises and it's just aesthetically pleasing to see and I feel it first, therapeutic and, uh, comforting to see how sun.'

✓ 'I prefer views in rural areas, especially the beach, because it offers beautiful sunsets and sunrises and it is aesthetically pleasing to see them; I find it therapeutic and comforting.'

'Present tense and sentence structure issues: The sentence is awkward and contains fillers and a fragment "to see how sun". Use consistent present tense and clear phrases: "it offers" is fine for singular "the beach"; refer back to sunsets and sunrises with "them." Remove filler words and restructure to avoid fragments. Improvement: eliminate hesitations, complete the thought, and maintain consistent tense and pronoun references.'

× 'I prefer views in other countries to be honest, because I think umm, it has a lot to offer more than my country or in the Philippines. I think umm, it's more pleasing to see what other countries can offer, uh, rather than what we have here in.'

✓ 'I prefer views in other countries, to be honest, because I think they have a lot more to offer than my country, the Philippines. I find it more pleasing to see what other countries can offer rather than what we have here.'

'Pronoun and subject-verb agreement with present tense: The original uses singular "it has" to refer to plural "other countries," which is incorrect; use plural pronoun "they have." Also remove fillers and incomplete ending "here in." Improve clarity by explicitly naming the country (the Philippines) and using consistent present-tense verbs. Suggestions: avoid filler words, ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents, and finish sentences.'