Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and expresses a clear opinion, but it is wordy and repetitive. Aim for a concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Use varied vocabulary and avoid repeating the same idea (e.g., “memories”) multiple times.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I photograph a sunrise, the picture reminds me of the colours, the fresh air, and how peaceful the morning felt.

Gợi ý: Good direct answer and a clear reason. Improve coherence by using a linking word to contrast the two settings, and give a concrete example or brief detail to support your preference. Avoid vague phrases like “very peaceful” without elaboration.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more scenic. For instance, hiking in the mountains lets me see forests and streams, which feels more relaxing than looking at city skyscrapers and busy streets.

Gợi ý: Your response has interesting ideas but is unclear and slightly off-topic at the end. Start with a clear position (prefer own country or others), then give one specific reason and avoid introducing unrelated topics (like standard of living) unless you link them clearly. Use linking words to organise your points.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I want to learn more about its landscapes and culture. For example, visiting local national parks would help me understand native plants and traditions before I travel abroad.

× 'I do. I think taking photos of different views allows you to capture the moment and memories and not just for aesthetics, but it is also to remind you on how good the day is or the view is in front of you and that time it is a memory that would remind you of nature and of yourself.'

✓ 'I do. I think taking photos of different views allows you to capture moments and memories, not just for aesthetics, but also to remind you how good the day or the view in front of you was, and that moment becomes a memory that reminds you of nature and yourself.'

'Verb + -ing form' issue: The sentence uses 'that time it is a memory' and awkward verb forms. Use gerunds and infinitives correctly: 'taking photos' is fine, but use 'to remind' instead of 'it is also to remind you on' and 'that time' should be 'that moment' with consistent tense. Also replace 'on how good' with 'how good' and 'is' to 'was' to match past reference. Suggestion: keep gerund 'taking' and use infinitive 'to remind' correctly and choose consistent tense for clarity.

× '...but it is also to remind you on how good the day is or the view is in front of you...'

✓ '...but it is also to remind you how good the day or the view in front of you was... '

'Incorrect use of prepositions': English does not use 'remind someone on' in this context. The correct collocation is 'remind someone of' or drop the preposition and use 'remind you how...'. Also 'in front of you' can be integrated as 'the view in front of you'. Ensure tense consistency ('was' if referring to past experience). Recommendation: use 'remind you how...' or 'remind you of how...'.

× '...allows you to capture the moment and memories...'

✓ '...allows you to capture moments and memories...'

'Singular and plural issue': The phrase mixes singular 'the moment' with plural 'memories'. Use parallel plural nouns for general statements: 'moments and memories' or keep both singular consistently. Recommendation: use 'moments and memories' to indicate multiple occasions.

× 'I think the mountains and the nature itself is very peaceful and beautiful in rural areas compared to in urban areas as you can only spot buildings and also the nightlife.'

✓ 'I think the mountains and nature itself are very peaceful and beautiful in rural areas, compared to urban areas where you mainly see buildings and nightlife.'

'Present tense/subject-verb agreement issue': 'the mountains and the nature itself is' is incorrect because the compound subject requires 'are'. Also 'compared to in urban areas' is awkward; use 'compared to urban areas where...'. Recommendation: use plural verb 'are' and rephrase for clarity.

× 'I am more so to their standard of living and the quality of life that they're offering to the residents.'

✓ 'I am more concerned with their standard of living and the quality of life they offer residents.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure': 'I am more so to' is ungrammatical and 'they're offering to the residents' is wordy. Use 'concerned with' and 'they offer residents' for correct agreement and concise phrasing. Recommendation: use 'offer' to agree with plural subject 'they' and simplify the structure.

× 'Personally, I haven't explored my own country as much and I would like to appreciate its beauty and the nature that it's offering to me as it is more meaningful that I learned to appreciate my own culture before I appreciate others culture in other countries.'

✓ 'Personally, I haven't explored my own country much, and I would like to appreciate its beauty and nature. It is more meaningful if I learn to appreciate my own culture before I appreciate other cultures in other countries.'

'Past tense and tense consistency issue': The original mixes present perfect 'haven't explored' with awkward future/past phrasing 'that I learned to appreciate'. Use 'learn' in present or 'if I learn' for hypothetical meaning. Also correct 'others culture' to 'other cultures'. Recommendation: separate into two sentences for clarity and maintain consistent tense: present perfect + present/future conditional as appropriate.

× '...before I appreciate others culture in other countries.'

✓ '...before I appreciate other cultures in other countries.'

'Incorrect use of pronouns': 'others' is a pronoun that is misused here; the intended meaning requires the adjective 'other' modifying 'cultures'. Also pluralize 'culture' to 'cultures' when speaking generally. Recommendation: use 'other cultures'.