School— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and divide information into clear sentences: start with location, then your status as an international student and your program. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., use "I migrated" or "I moved here" and "I am an international student"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "and" or "also" only when needed.

Ví dụ: My school is in Brandon, a small and peaceful city in the province of Manitoba. I moved here from my home country and I am an international student. I am currently in my final semester studying for a diploma in Early Childhood Education.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then provide 1–2 specific reasons with brief examples. Correct grammar ("my professors give me support" not "gives") and avoid redundant phrases like "so much there." Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, I really like my school because the atmosphere is very welcoming and inclusive. For example, my professors are supportive both during and outside office hours, and my classmates are always willing to help with assignments.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid repetitive phrasing. Use one strong reason and a short example. Simplify sentences and correct phrasing ("everyone, including those with special needs"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it is an excellent place to study because it is inclusive and accessible to everyone, including students with special needs. For example, the campus has ramps and support services for students who need extra help.

Gợi ý: Be natural and avoid informal or awkward words like "brutally." Give one clear description and a brief reason or example. Correct redundancy and grammar ("quieter" not "quieter" paired oddly). Use linking words like "so" or "therefore." Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: The environment at my school is peaceful, welcoming and inclusive, so it is easy to concentrate. Therefore, I often prefer to stay on campus to complete my assignments instead of studying at home.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear opinion, then give a logical reason and a concise example. Improve grammar and clarity ("interest helps you achieve your goals" and "I wasn't very interested in studying when I was a child"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Interest is very important because it motivates you to work hard and reach your goals. For example, I struggled with exams as a child until I developed an interest in learning, after which my results improved.

× 'My school is located in a small, beautiful and quieter city named Brandon and it falls under the province of Manitoba and being I am migrated over here being a international student and I am pursuing my early childhood education diploma right now I am in my final semester.'

✓ 'My school is located in the small, beautiful, and quiet city of Brandon in the province of Manitoba. I migrated here as an international student, and I am currently pursuing a diploma in Early Childhood Education; I am in my final semester.'

'Original sentence is a run-on with awkward clauses and incorrect word forms (quieter, being I am migrated, being a international student). Break into two sentences for clarity, use correct adjective (quiet), correct verb tense (migrated) and article (an -> a before vowel sound error corrected to an -> an is wrong originally; correct is "an international" so keep "an international student" but the rewrite uses "as an international student"). Use present continuous for current study (am currently pursuing) and proper noun capitalization for the program name. Suggestion: split ideas into separate sentences, use simple past for migration event and present continuous for ongoing study.'

× 'I am glad to be the part of this camp of this institute.'

✓ 'I am glad to be part of this campus and of this institute.'

'the part' is incorrect collocation; 'camp' is wrong word choice (likely campus). Use 'be part of' without 'the'. Also include parallel preposition 'of this institute' for clarity. Suggest using 'campus' instead of 'camp' when referring to school grounds.'

× 'Oh yes, definitely. I like my school so much there because the environment of my institutes is very welcoming, inclusive and my professors and all my colleagues are very helpful even though my professors gives me a support during the office hours and after office hours.'

✓ 'Oh yes, definitely. I like my school a lot because the environment is very welcoming and inclusive, and my professors and classmates are very helpful. My professors give me support during and after office hours.'

'so much there' is awkward; 'institutes' should be singular or omitted; parallel structure needed for adjectives and nouns. Subject-verb agreement error: 'professors gives' -> 'professors give'. 'a support' -> 'support' (uncountable). Simplify 'during the office hours and after office hours' to 'during and after office hours.' Suggestions: keep parallel lists, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use uncountable nouns correctly.'

× 'There is no doubt like my school, the place where I am studying is very inclusive, accessible and welcoming for everybody, every gender, every individual, even with their special needs or additional needs.'

✓ 'There is no doubt that my school, the place where I study, is very inclusive, accessible, and welcoming to everyone, regardless of gender or special/additional needs.'

'There is no doubt like my school' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'There is no doubt that' to introduce a clause. 'where I am studying' can be simplified to 'where I study.' Use 'welcoming to everyone' and 'regardless of' for inclusivity. Also 'every gender, every individual' is redundant; combine for conciseness.'

× 'So I think there is no point that proves that my school is not a good place.'

✓ 'So I think there is no evidence that my school is not a good place.'

'point that proves' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use 'evidence that' to express lack of proof. Keep tense and meaning consistent.'

× 'It's really a great place to.'

✓ 'It's really a great place.'

'to' at the end is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Remove 'to' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: ensure sentence endings are complete.'

× 'The atmosphere of my school is very welcoming, inclusive and accessible to everybody and the the camp is where I am studying right now is very peaceful and quieter and it gives me a more room to study peacefully.'

✓ 'The atmosphere of my school is very welcoming, inclusive, and accessible to everyone. The campus where I am studying now is very peaceful and quiet, and it gives me more room to study.'

'the the' duplicate; 'camp' should be 'campus'; 'quieter' is comparative and requires comparison—use 'quiet' instead. 'more room' not 'a more room'. 'study peacefully' is redundant when 'peaceful' already used—simplify. Suggestions: fix word choice, remove duplicates, correct comparative form, and adjust article usage.'

× 'I brutally prefer to stay at school to do my assignments rather than going home just because of that is quite.'

✓ 'I strongly prefer to stay at school to do my assignments rather than go home because it is quiet.'

'brutally prefer' is incorrect collocation; use 'strongly prefer'. 'rather than going home' should be parallel with 'to stay' -> 'rather than go home'. 'just because of that is quite' is ungrammatical: use 'because it is quiet.' Suggestions: use appropriate adverbs and maintain parallel structure.'

× 'So for me, interest is something helps you achieve your goals.'

✓ 'For me, interest is something that helps you achieve your goals.'

Missing relative pronoun 'that' after 'something'. This creates a sentence fragment. Add 'that' to link the noun and the clause. Suggestion: include 'that' or rephrase to 'Interest helps you...'.'

× 'If you don't have the interest in studies or the work you want to do, you are unable to achieve the goals.'

✓ 'If you don't have an interest in studying or in the work you want to do, you will be unable to achieve your goals.'

'the interest in studies' is awkward: use 'an interest in studying'. Conditional meaning requires future consequence: use 'will be unable' rather than present 'are unable'. Also 'the goals' -> 'your goals'. Suggestions: use articles correctly and choose appropriate conditional tense.'

× 'For instance, when I was a kid, I was not into so much into the study, so I failed so many times when I started taking interest.'

✓ 'For instance, when I was a kid, I was not very interested in studying, so I failed many times before I started taking an interest.'

'not into so much into the study' is ungrammatical and repetitive; use 'not very interested in studying'. 'failed so many times when I started taking interest' has wrong time sequence: failures occurred before interest began—use 'before I started taking an interest'. Also use 'many times' instead of 'so many times'. Suggestions: simplify phrasing and make time sequence clear.'