Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., “umm,” “my my,” repeated phrases). Also limit to about 2–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “present,” “excited,” “memorable”).

Ví dụ: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child that my parents and cousins gave me for my birthday. I was thrilled because learning to ride had been a dream, and I spent hours practicing around the neighborhood, which created many happy memories.

Gợi ý: Make a direct topic sentence, then give one or two clear, specific reasons linked with connectors. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., “one of the most common forms,” “because,” avoid repeating words). Add a brief example or comparison to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute short distances. For example, many office workers and students cycle to work or school to avoid traffic and save on transport costs.

× Umm yes, I did have a bicycle when I was a child which was brought my my parents and cousins when I was a kid for my birthday and I really enjoyed riding it because it was my biggest dream to ride a bicycle and I felt so grateful when I received it.

✓ Umm yes, I did have a bicycle when I was a child which was brought for me by my parents and cousins for my birthday, and I really enjoyed riding it because it had been my biggest dream to ride a bicycle, so I felt very grateful when I received it.

The sentence contains several problems: incorrect pronoun/order 'brought my my parents' should be 'brought for me by my parents' (incorrect use of pronouns and word order), repetition 'my my', and awkward tense and wording. Also 'biggest dream to ride' is better as 'had been my biggest dream to ride' to show prior desire. Suggest using 'brought for me by' to correctly place the indirect object and remove repetition; change 'was my biggest dream' to 'had been my biggest dream' to clarify the sequence of events; use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I do things that I do think that bikes are popular in my country as it is one of the most common form of transportation, especially among people who go for work and for because as it is is easier and convenient and less expensive.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country because they are one of the most common forms of transportation, especially among people who commute to work, since they are easier, more convenient, and less expensive.

This sentence has multiple structure and redundancy issues: unnecessary phrases 'I do things that I do think' should be simplified to 'I do think'; 'it is one of the most common form' has singular/plural mismatch and incorrect pronoun reference—use 'they are' and 'forms' (singular/plural issue and pronoun reference). 'People who go for work' is unnatural; use 'people who commute to work'. Remove duplicated 'because as it is is' and correct comparative adjectives to parallel form 'easier, more convenient, and less expensive'. Suggestions: simplify redundant phrases, ensure subject-verb and singular/plural agreement, use natural collocations like 'commute to work', and list parallel adjectives with appropriate comparative forms.