Part 1
Giám khảo
How often do you wear T-shirts?
Thí sinh
Actually everyday I'm using T-shirt. At the very minimum I'm using T-shirt for going to sleep at night and sometimes when I eat out and going to shopping centre. I also use T-shirt because I found the comfortable little of T-shirt for myself.
Giám khảo
Do you often buy T-shirts?
Thí sinh
Not that often, but when I'm going to for example department store or shopping center, my first attire I will looking for T-shirt and then after that I'm going to looking for some jeans or some short pants.
Giám khảo
How fashionable are T-shirts for older people in your country?
Thí sinh
For other people is actually not that fashionable because sometimes the older wearing the, uh, more like shirts or a formal polo shirt and et cetera.
Giám khảo
Did you wear T-shirts when you were a kid?
Thí sinh
When I was a kid every day I used T-shirt for daily activities such as play out and doing some sports. Also when I playing a child's game like hide and seek with my neighbors.
How often do you wear T-shirts?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta singkat. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.
Ví dụ: I wear T-shirts every day, at least when I sleep. I also wear them when I go out to eat or visit the shopping center because I find T-shirts very comfortable.
Do you often buy T-shirts?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan singkat serta tambahkan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran jawaban.
Ví dụ: I don't buy T-shirts very often, but when I visit a department store or shopping center, I usually look for T-shirts first, then jeans or shorts.
How fashionable are T-shirts for older people in your country?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari penggunaan kata pengisi seperti 'uh'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan lengkap dengan contoh.
Ví dụ: T-shirts are not very fashionable for older people in my country because they usually prefer wearing shirts or formal polo shirts.
Did you wear T-shirts when you were a kid?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta singkat. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.
Ví dụ: When I was a kid, I wore T-shirts every day for activities like playing outside, doing sports, and games like hide and seek with my neighbors.
× Actually everyday I'm using T-shirt.
✓ Actually, every day I wear a T-shirt.
The original sentence incorrectly uses the present continuous tense 'I'm using' for a habitual action, which should be expressed in the simple present tense 'I wear'. Also, 'everyday' should be two words 'every day' when used as an adverbial phrase meaning 'each day'.
× Actually everyday I'm using T-shirt.
✓ Actually, every day I wear T-shirts.
The noun 'T-shirt' should be plural 'T-shirts' when referring to wearing them regularly in general. Also, 'everyday' should be 'every day'.
× At the very minimum I'm using T-shirt for going to sleep at night and sometimes when I eat out and going to shopping centre.
✓ At the very least, I wear a T-shirt to sleep at night and sometimes when I eat out or go to the shopping centre.
The present continuous 'I'm using' is incorrect for habitual actions; simple present 'I wear' is appropriate. Also, 'for going to sleep' should be 'to sleep'. The phrase 'and going to shopping centre' lacks a subject and verb agreement; it should be 'or go to the shopping centre'.
× At the very minimum I'm using T-shirt for going to sleep at night and sometimes when I eat out and going to shopping centre.
✓ At the very least, I wear T-shirts to sleep at night and sometimes when I eat out or go to the shopping centre.
Plural form 'T-shirts' is more appropriate when referring to wearing them habitually. Also, 'shopping centre' should be preceded by 'the' as a specific place.
× I also use T-shirt because I found the comfortable little of T-shirt for myself.
✓ I also use T-shirts because I find them comfortable for myself.
The phrase 'found the comfortable little of T-shirt' is incorrect. 'Find' is present tense to match habitual action. 'Comfortable little' is incorrect; 'comfortable' alone suffices. Also, 'T-shirt' should be plural 'T-shirts' and 'them' is used as pronoun for plural noun.
× Not that often, but when I'm going to for example department store or shopping center, my first attire I will looking for T-shirt and then after that I'm going to looking for some jeans or some short pants.
✓ Not that often, but when I go to, for example, a department store or shopping center, the first thing I look for is a T-shirt, and after that, I look for some jeans or shorts.
'I'm going to' is incorrect here; simple present 'I go' is appropriate for habitual actions. 'I will looking' is incorrect; it should be 'I look'. 'Some short pants' is better expressed as 'shorts'. Also, articles 'a' before 'department store' and 'shopping center' are needed.
× Not that often, but when I'm going to for example department store or shopping center, my first attire I will looking for T-shirt and then after that I'm going to looking for some jeans or some short pants.
✓ Not that often, but when I go to, for example, a department store or shopping center, the first thing I look for is a T-shirt, and after that, I look for some jeans or shorts.
The phrase 'going to for example department store' is missing the preposition 'to' before 'department store'. Also, 'my first attire I will looking for' is ungrammatical; it should be 'the first thing I look for'.
× For other people is actually not that fashionable because sometimes the older wearing the, uh, more like shirts or a formal polo shirt and et cetera.
✓ For older people, T-shirts are actually not that fashionable because sometimes they wear shirts, formal polo shirts, and so on.
'The older' is incorrect; it should be 'older people'. 'Wearing the, uh, more like shirts' is ungrammatical; it should be 'they wear shirts'. Also, plural forms 'shirts' and 'polo shirts' are appropriate. 'Et cetera' is better replaced with 'and so on' in spoken English.
× When I was a kid every day I used T-shirt for daily activities such as play out and doing some sports.
✓ When I was a kid, every day I used to wear T-shirts for daily activities such as playing outside and doing some sports.
'Used T-shirt' is incorrect; it should be 'used to wear T-shirts'. 'Play out' is incorrect; 'playing outside' is better. Also, 'doing some sports' is acceptable but 'playing sports' is more natural.
× When I was a kid every day I used T-shirt for daily activities such as play out and doing some sports.
✓ When I was a kid, every day I used to wear T-shirts for daily activities such as playing outside and doing some sports.
The verb 'play' should be in the gerund form 'playing' to match the structure 'such as playing'.
× Also when I playing a child's game like hide and seek with my neighbors.
✓ Also, when I played children's games like hide and seek with my neighbors.
'When I playing' is incorrect; past tense 'when I played' is required to match the past time frame. 'A child's game' should be plural 'children's games' to refer generally.