Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 좀 더 구체적인 예시나 감정을 추가하면 더 풍부한 답변이 될 수 있습니다. 예를 들어, 공유를 통해 어떤 특별한 경험이나 교훈을 얻었는지 설명해 보세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, they did. I remember my mother often encouraged me to share toys and snacks with my cousins. At first, it was challenging because I was very attached to my belongings, but over time I realized that sharing not only made me feel happier but also strengthened my bonds with my family.

Gợi ý: 답변이 명확하지만, 'the the'와 같은 작은 오타를 주의하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 흐름을 더 자연스럽게 만들어 보세요.

Ví dụ: I enjoy sharing food the most. For instance, if I try a new dessert, I always want my friends to taste it as well. Moreover, I like sharing ideas or experiences, especially when I believe they could inspire or help someone.

Gợi ý: 답변이 적절하지만, 'cheese'는 공유가 일반적인 음식이므로 부적절한 예시입니다. 더 적절한 예시를 사용하고, 문장 구조를 조금 더 명확하게 다듬어 보세요.

Ví dụ: Personal items like toothbrushes, makeup, or bank details definitely shouldn't be shared because they are either unhygienic or sensitive. I believe that setting boundaries is just as important as being generous.

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적입니다. 다만, 연결어를 추가하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하면 더 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, actually I bought some books recently and I've been lending them to my friends. I find it satisfying because when someone else enjoys the same story or gains new insights from what I've learned, it feels rewarding.

Gợi ý: 답변이 명확하지만, 문장 사이에 연결어를 넣어 더 자연스럽게 만들어 보세요. 또한, 이유를 조금 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Usually, my mother is the first person I would like to share good news with because she has always been supportive. After that, I'd probably tell my closest friend who understands me well.

Gợi ý: 답변이 좋지만, 'passing on exam'은 자연스럽지 않은 표현입니다. 더 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸고, 문장 연결을 부드럽게 해보세요.

Ví dụ: Mostly, I share personal updates like passing exams, getting new opportunities, or even discovering great restaurants. I believe that sharing positive news helps keep our friendship vibrant and connected.

× I enjoy sharing food the the most.

✓ I enjoy sharing food the most.

중복된 전치사 'the'가 사용되어 문장이 부자연스럽습니다. 'the the' 중 하나를 제거하여 'the most'로 수정해야 합니다.

× Personal item like toothbrush, cheese, makeup or bank details definitely shouldn't be shared because they are either unhygienic or sensitive.

✓ Personal items like toothbrushes, cheese, makeup or bank details definitely shouldn't be shared because they are either unhygienic or sensitive.

'Personal item'은 단수형이지만 여러 예시가 나열되어 있으므로 복수형 'Personal items'로 수정해야 하며, 'toothbrush'도 복수형 'toothbrushes'로 바꾸는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

× Mostly personal updates like passing on exam, getting a new opportunity, or even similar things like discovering a great restaurant.

✓ Mostly personal updates like passing an exam, getting a new opportunity, or even similar things like discovering a great restaurant.

'passing on exam'은 부적절한 표현으로 'passing an exam'이 올바른 표현입니다. 'on' 전치사는 필요하지 않습니다.