Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Try to use more natural English expressions and avoid redundancy. For example, "happiness shares means happiness double" is unclear and could be rephrased. Also, watch for grammar errors and sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents taught me that sharing happiness doubles it. So, when I was in primary school, I often shared my snacks with friends. This helped me build strong relationships and created memorable moments that I still cherish today.

Gợi ý: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary accuracy. For example, "such shares" is unclear. Use linking words like "for example" or "such as" to introduce examples. Also, avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Ví dụ: I like to share a wide variety of things, such as personal experiences and knowledge. For example, during study week, I enjoy discussing with my friends to exchange ideas, which helps us prepare more effectively for our exams.

Gợi ý: Complete your sentences and avoid grammatical errors. For instance, "lead to" should be followed by the result. Also, use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

Ví dụ: I think personal items, such as cosmetics and toothbrushes, are not suitable for sharing because they can easily spread bacteria and affect hygiene. For example, sharing cosmetic brushes can cause skin infections and lead to health problems.

Gợi ý: Focus on grammar and sentence clarity. For example, "a notes" should be "some notes" or "a note." Also, avoid confusing sentences like "I we both can and have a deep understanding." Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ví dụ: Yes, I recently shared some notes with my friend because I believe she can help me make them more organized and detailed. By discussing the materials together, we both gain a deeper understanding and can prepare for our exams more effectively.

Gợi ý: Correct word choice and grammar are important. For example, "support me unconscious" should be "support me unconditionally." Also, ensure subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness. Use linking words to explain reasons.

Ví dụ: I would say my family because they support me unconditionally in every decision I make. So, whether the news is positive or not, I like to share it with them immediately since they truly encourage and support me.

Gợi ý: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow. For example, "As passing exams and graduating are our top priorities, so" is redundant. Use linking words properly to connect ideas logically.

Ví dụ: I usually share news about exams with my friends, such as exam dates and when results will be released. Since passing exams and graduating are our top priorities, we keep each other updated and informed.

× Yes, my parents once taught me happiness shares means happiness double.

✓ Yes, my parents once taught me that happiness shared means happiness doubles.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and missing conjunction 'that'. 'Shares' should be 'shared' to indicate past participle, and 'means' should be 'means' but the subject is plural so 'means' is correct. 'Happiness double' should be 'happiness doubles' to indicate the effect. The sentence needs 'that' to connect the clause properly.

× So I often share my snacks when I was in my primary school.

✓ So I often shared my snacks when I was in primary school.

The sentence mixes present tense 'share' with past time 'when I was'. To maintain past tense consistency, 'share' should be 'shared'. Also, 'in my primary school' is better as 'in primary school' for natural phrasing.

× It helped me to build strong relationship and some moment some memorable moments that I still cherish today.

✓ It helped me to build strong relationships and some memorable moments that I still cherish today.

'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match 'some memorable moments'. The phrase 'some moment some memorable moments' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'some memorable moments'.

× I would say there is a wide variety of thing that I would love to share such shares, personal experiences and knowledge.

✓ I would say there is a wide variety of things that I would love to share such as personal experiences and knowledge.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'a wide variety of'. 'Such shares' is incorrect; it should be 'such as' to introduce examples.

× During study week, I love to share my knowledge with my friends through discussion.

✓ During study week, I love to share my knowledge with my friends in discussions.

'Through discussion' is less natural; 'in discussions' better expresses the idea of sharing knowledge during multiple discussions.

× I believe that discussion can exchange our ideas and help us to prepare more effectively for our exam.

✓ I believe that discussions can exchange our ideas and help us to prepare more effectively for our exams.

'Discussion' should be plural 'discussions' to indicate multiple instances. 'Exam' should be plural 'exams' to match the context of multiple exams.

× I think personal items such as cosmetics and toothbrushes are not suitable for sharing as it can spread the bacterias easily and affect hygiene.

✓ I think personal items such as cosmetics and toothbrushes are not suitable for sharing as they can spread bacteria easily and affect hygiene.

'It' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'items'. 'Bacterias' is incorrect; the plural of 'bacteria' is 'bacteria' (already plural).

× For example, sharing a cosmetic brushes can cause skin infections and lead to.

✓ For example, sharing cosmetic brushes can cause skin infections and lead to problems.

'A cosmetic brushes' is incorrect; 'brushes' is plural so 'a' should be removed. The sentence is incomplete; 'lead to' should be followed by an object, e.g., 'problems'.

× Yes, I have shared a notes with my friends recently because I believe she can help me to make it more organised and detailed by discussing the materials.

✓ Yes, I have shared notes with my friends recently because I believe they can help me to make them more organised and detailed by discussing the materials.

'A notes' is incorrect; 'notes' is plural so 'a' should be removed. 'She' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'friends'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to 'notes'.

× I we both can and have a deep understanding about the materials and prepare for our exams more effectively.

✓ We both can have a deep understanding of the materials and prepare for our exams more effectively.

The phrase 'I we both can and have' is incorrect; it should be 'We both can have'. 'Understanding about' should be 'understanding of'.

× I would say is my family because they support me unconscious, unconditionally and in every decision I made.

✓ I would say it is my family because they support me unconsciously, unconditionally, and in every decision I make.

'Is my family' needs subject 'it'. 'Unconscious' is incorrect; the adverb 'unconsciously' is needed. 'In every decision I made' should be 'in every decision I make' to maintain present tense.

× So no matter the news is positive or not, I would love to share with them immediately because they are the one who truly encourage and support me.

✓ So no matter whether the news is positive or not, I would love to share it with them immediately because they are the ones who truly encourage and support me.

'Share with them' needs object 'it' to specify sharing the news. 'They are the one' should be 'they are the ones' to agree in number. 'Encourage' should be 'encourage' (plural verb) to agree with plural subject 'ones'.

× I usually share news about exams with my friends, for example, the exam dates and when the result will be released.

✓ I usually share news about exams with my friends; for example, the exam dates and when the results will be released.

The sentence is a run-on; a semicolon or period is needed before 'for example'. 'Result' should be plural 'results' to match context.

× As passing exams and graduating are our top priorities, so we want to keep each other updated and informed.

✓ As passing exams and graduating are our top priorities, we want to keep each other updated and informed.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant after 'as' clause; remove 'so' for correct sentence structure.