Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态和单复数的正确使用，同时避免冗余，保持句子简洁流畅。

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. My parents often told me to share my food with family members when I was a child, so I could become a kinder and more peaceful person.

Gợi ý: 回答内容不够连贯，部分句子不完整且表达不清晰，建议使用连接词使回答更连贯，并补充具体细节。

Ví dụ: I like to share good news with my family, such as when I perform well in class or receive a scholarship at university. Sharing these moments makes me feel happy and connected with them.

Gợi ý: 回答表达较为清晰，但语法和用词有待改进，建议使用更准确的表达方式，并注意句子结构的完整性。

Ví dụ: I think private and essential information, like passwords, ID numbers, and passport details, should not be shared because they can be misused for illegal activities.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和词汇。

Ví dụ: Last weekend, I shared a chocolate bar with my best friends because I wanted to try it. It was very delicious, so I ordered the same one to share with them.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法和表达不流畅的问题，建议使用更简洁的句子，避免重复，并注意主谓一致。

Ví dụ: I would first share good news with my best friend because it makes us closer. Sometimes, I also share with my family because they feel proud of me.

Gợi ý: 回答不够连贯且语法错误较多，建议练习使用完整句子，避免口头语，并清晰表达观点。

Ví dụ: I usually share good news with my friends because it makes them happy and strengthens our relationship. I also share my frustrations with them because they offer support.

× My parent told me a lot about sharing for example when I was kids and he always told me to share my food with other family members so that I could be came more kind and peaceful person besides that.

✓ My parents told me a lot about sharing. For example, when I was a kid, they always told me to share my food with other family members so that I could become a kinder and more peaceful person besides that.

“parent”应为复数“parents”，因为指的是父母双方；“kids”应为单数“a kid”，因为指的是自己小时候；“he”应改为“they”，与复数“parents”一致；“be came”是错误的动词形式，应为“become”；“kind”应为比较级“kinder”，与“more peaceful”保持一致。

× I like to share all kinds of things. I have some good news. I tend to share this with my family members. For example, when I perform better as class and get scholarship at the university, I tend to share the good news with my parents. Besides that, I feel less.

✓ I like to share all kinds of things. I have some good news. I tend to share it with my family members. For example, when I perform better in class and get a scholarship at the university, I tend to share the good news with my parents. Besides that, I feel less lonely.

“share this”中的“this”应改为“it”，指代“good news”；“perform better as class”应为“perform better in class”，介词错误；“get scholarship”前应加不定冠词“a”；“feel less”不完整，应补充完整表达，如“feel less lonely”。

× I think must be the private essential information. To be specific, you shouldn't share your passwords, ID numbers, even your passport details can be messaged by others, especially someone to do some illegal.

✓ I think it must be private essential information. To be specific, you shouldn't share your passwords, ID numbers, or even your passport details, because they can be accessed by others, especially someone who might do something illegal.

“must be the private essential information”缺少主语，应加“it”；“can be messaged by others”表达不当，应改为“can be accessed by others”；“someone to do some illegal”语法错误，应改为“someone who might do something illegal”。

× Yes Sir, the last weekend I shared a trolley bar with my besties because I really want don't know how delicious the chocolate bar is, you know it tastes so delicious and tasty. And beside I said the same order on the platform so I can share.

✓ Yes Sir, last weekend I shared a chocolate bar with my besties because I really wanted to know how delicious the chocolate bar is. You know, it tastes so delicious and tasty. And besides, I ordered the same one on the platform so I could share.

“really want don't know”语法错误，应为“really wanted to know”；“trolley bar”应为“chocolate bar”；“beside”应为“besides”；“I said the same order”应为“I ordered the same one”；“so I can share”时态应与过去时间一致，改为“so I could share”。

× Ah, I see must be my best friend because they will feel happy and the same time, uh, and I feel I get a closer relationship with them. And besides that, sometimes I will share this good news with my family members because they will proud for me, but I don't want to uh, speak everything with them.

✓ Ah, I think it must be my best friend because they will feel happy, and at the same time, I feel I get a closer relationship with them. Besides that, sometimes I share this good news with my family members because they will be proud of me, but I don't want to speak everything with them.

“I see must be”表达不自然，应为“I think it must be”；“and the same time”应为“at the same time”；“they will proud for me”缺少动词，应为“they will be proud of me”；“sometimes I will share”时态调整为一般现在时“sometimes I share”。

× Uh, it's hard to say, but uh, why get the good news? I will definitely share to them, uh, because they will feel happy for me, uh, which can strengthen our relationships. Besides that, uh, I feel a little frustrated. I will told my friends also because they will give me some.

✓ Uh, it's hard to say, but when I get good news, I will definitely share it with them because they will feel happy for me, which can strengthen our relationships. Besides that, when I feel a little frustrated, I will tell my friends because they will give me some support.

“why get the good news”应为“when I get good news”；“share to them”应为“share it with them”；“I will told”时态错误，应为“I will tell”；“they will give me some”不完整，应补充“support”等内容。