Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid unclear words (e.g. “Dapping up”) and grammar mistakes. Use linking words like “for example” or “also.”

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents and teachers taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to give snacks and toys to classmates so we could play together, and they explained that sharing is an important virtue in Chinese culture.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give specific reasons with clearer linking phrases. Correct collocations (e.g. “taste” not “tasty”, “functions” not “function”) and avoid vague phrases like “it is much cheaper” without context.

Ví dụ: I usually share toys and snacks with friends. For example, sharing snacks lets us compare tastes and sharing toys lets us try different functions, and it also reduces cost because we don’t have to buy duplicates.

Gợi ý: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear statement and give a brief reason and example. Fix pronoun and verb form errors (e.g. “contain”, “I’m not willing”).

Ví dụ: I wouldn’t share personal gifts or items with sentimental value. For example, a gift from a close friend or a family heirloom is meaningful to me, so I prefer to keep it rather than give it away.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer with clear details and correct word choice. Specify the platform names correctly and use past tense consistently. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, recently I shared information about this exam with my parents and a close friend. I found study tips on the REDBook app and sent the most useful articles to them so they could prepare more effectively.

Gợi ý: Make the response natural and brief. State the person first, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetition, and correct grammar (“closest people”, “something that needs to be celebrated”).

Ví dụ: I would tell my parents first because they are the closest people to me and always support me. For example, when I have good news they often celebrate with me and sometimes help pay for a small party.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear statement and use natural vocabulary. Replace awkward metaphors (e.g. “the gate between us”) with simpler phrases like “we are closer in age” or “we have similar experiences.” Give a brief example.

Ví dụ: I usually share school-related news with my friends because we are the same age and have similar experiences. For example, I tell them about exams, class events, or interesting lectures so we can discuss how we felt.

× Dapping up for years when I was a child, my parents and all of my teachers taught me that we need to share, and share is 1 important virtue in Chinese culture.

✓ Growing up when I was a child, my parents and all of my teachers taught me that we need to share, and sharing is an important virtue in Chinese culture.

The phrase 'Dapping up' is incorrect; likely intended 'growing up' which uses the present participle correctly to form a participle clause modifying the subject. Also 'share is 1 important' should be 'sharing is an important' because the gerund 'sharing' functions as a noun here and 'an' is the correct article before a singular countable noun phrase beginning with a vowel sound. Suggestion: use 'Growing up' and change 'share' to 'sharing' and '1' to 'an'.

× We need to share with our friends and the others.

✓ We need to share with our friends and others.

The phrase 'the others' is unnecessary and awkward after 'friends'; 'others' is the correct pronoun to refer to other people in general. Remove the definite article 'the'.

× Maybe toys and snacks, because we can share our opinions towards the tasty and the function of the toys together.

✓ Maybe toys and snacks, because we can share our opinions about the taste and the function of the toys together.

'Towards' is incorrect with 'opinions'; use 'about'. 'Tasty' is an adjective; the noun 'taste' is appropriate. 'The function of the toys' is acceptable but 'the' can remain. Use 'about the taste' to express opinions on flavor. Suggestion: use 'about the taste and the function'.

× Besides, it is much cheaper, so it is suitable to be shared.

✓ Besides, it is much cheaper, so it is suitable for sharing.

Passive infinitive 'to be shared' is grammatically possible but 'suitable for sharing' is the natural collocation in English. Use 'for sharing' after 'suitable'.

× Umm off top of my head, maybe some gifts which it contains personal values because for example if the gifts are given by one of my important friends, I don't willing to share it with others because I think it is only the connection between me.

✓ Off the top of my head, maybe some gifts that contain personal value; for example, if a gift is given by one of my close friends, I am not willing to share it with others because I think it represents a connection between me and that friend.

Multiple problems: use the idiom 'off the top of my head'; 'which it contains' is ungrammatical — use a relative clause 'that contain' or 'which contain' and remove the extra pronoun 'it'. 'Personal values' should be 'personal value' or 'personal meaning'. 'I don't willing' is incorrect: use 'I am not willing' or 'I don't want to'. 'Share it' — use 'share them' if plural 'gifts', or 'a gift' singular. The final clause 'only the connection between me' lacks the other party — complete as 'between me and that friend'. Suggestions: simplify sentence and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronouns/conjunctions.

× I have shared some digital information with my parents about this examination.

✓ I shared some digital information with my parents about this examination.

The present perfect 'I have shared' is grammatical but in the context of a past recent action described in a conversation about 'recently', either present perfect or simple past can be used; however the student later uses simple past inconsistently. To fit the spoken narrative and match the following past verbs, use simple past 'I shared'. If the action is still relevant now, 'I have shared' would also be acceptable. Suggestion: maintain tense consistency and use 'shared'.

× I found this information on Redbook and application and I shared it with one of my close friends who are prepared for this examination.

✓ I found this information on Redbook and an app, and I shared it with one of my close friends who was preparing for this examination.

'Application' is awkward; 'an app' is natural. Missing articles: 'an app'. 'who are prepared' is wrong because 'one of my close friends' is singular, so the relative clause needs singular verb 'was preparing' or 'is preparing' depending on tense. Use 'was preparing' to match simple past 'shared'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'an app' and make verb agreement singular in the relative clause.

× My parents maybe because they are one of the most closest person around me, I want to share all of my things with them, especially something need to be celebrated because they can give me some money to celebrate or have a party together.

✓ My parents, maybe, because they are the closest people to me. I want to share everything with them, especially things that need to be celebrated, because they can give me money to celebrate or have a party together.

Problems: 'one of the most closest person' is incorrect — 'closest' is already a superlative and 'one of the' requires plural noun: 'one of the closest people' or simply 'the closest people'. 'Maybe' should be set off with commas. 'All of my things' is awkward; use 'everything'. 'Something need to be celebrated' requires relative clause 'things that need to be celebrated'. 'Some money' or 'money' is correct; remove redundant 'some' before 'money to celebrate'. Suggestions: correct superlative usage, ensure plural when needed, and use relative clauses for clarity.

× They can feel what I feel and the gate between us are relatively narrow than those in me and my parents.

✓ They can understand how I feel, and the gap between us is relatively smaller than the gap between my parents and me.

'They can feel what I feel' is understandable but 'understand how I feel' is more natural. 'Gate' is a wrong word; should be 'gap'. 'are relatively narrow than' has wrong verb agreement and comparative structure; use 'is relatively smaller than' or 'is narrower than'. Also 'those in me and my parents' is ungrammatical — clarify as 'the gap between my parents and me'. Suggestion: use 'gap', correct verb agreement, and compare two things clearly.

× I shared it with one of my close friends who are prepared for this examination.

✓ I shared it with one of my close friends who was preparing for this examination.

The relative clause refers to 'one' (singular), so the verb must be singular: 'was preparing' or 'is preparing'. 'Are' is plural and does not agree with the singular antecedent. Suggestion: match verb number with the antecedent in relative clauses.