Science— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be consistent with tense and reduce hesitations; start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'I enjoyed' not 'I enjoy') and remove filler words like 'uh'.

Ví dụ: I enjoyed studying science at school, especially biology. For example, I loved learning how organs work together to keep the body healthy, such as how the heart pumps blood and the lungs exchange oxygen. This fascinated me because it explained everyday functions and human health.

Gợi ý: Provide a clearer, shorter main sentence and then a concise supporting example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I chose commerce' and 'if I have symptoms, I can recognize possible illnesses'). Use linking words like 'however' appropriately and avoid vague phrases.

Ví dụ: Not regularly, because I chose commerce and studied accounting and economics. However, I still use basic science knowledge sometimes; for instance, if I notice a high temperature and other symptoms, I can recognise that I might be coming down with a fever and seek treatment.

Gợi ý: Good content and specific reasons. Improve sentence structure and conciseness: state the topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition ('want to' repeated).

Ví dụ: I would like to study biology further, especially human reproductive health. For example, I want to understand hormonal changes in adulthood and learn about fertility and menopause management, since this knowledge would help me personally and professionally.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary and spelling ('dacrome' unclear — likely 'a rule' or 'a requirement'), fix grammar and finish the final sentence. Start with a clear opinion, then give two concise reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think basic science education is important. For example, in India students must study science until tenth grade, which helps them understand everyday issues like health and the environment; therefore, everyone should have at least basic scientific knowledge.

Gợi ý: Give a direct short answer then one clear reason and a brief example. Simplify language and correct phrasing ('not very keen on' rather than 'not keen and fascinated'). Avoid long run-on sentences.

Ví dụ: Not really; I rarely watch science TV programmes. I'm more interested in fashion and business shows because they relate directly to my career goals, for instance I follow fashion trend reports and business news to support my work plans.

× Yes, when I was a student, I enjoy studying science as my favorite part was biology.

✓ Yes, when I was a student, I enjoyed studying science; my favorite part was biology.

The sentence mixes past context ('when I was a student') with present tense 'enjoy'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame. Also separate clauses for clarity using a semicolon or conjunction.

× For instance, I love to explore about how the organs function and how they perform the daily activities to keep the body, uh, perfect and functioning throughout the life.

✓ For instance, I loved exploring how organs function and how they perform daily activities to keep the body healthy and functioning throughout life.

After 'love' in past context use past 'loved' and gerund 'exploring'. 'Explore about' is incorrect; use 'explore' or 'explore how'. 'Perfect' is unsuitable for body health; use 'healthy'. 'Throughout the life' should be 'throughout life'.

× I don't use science knowledge regularly because I opted commerce after my school and studied accounting and economics.

✓ I didn't use scientific knowledge regularly because I chose commerce after school and studied accounting and economics.

The first clause refers to a past choice, so use past tense 'didn't use' or better 'didn't use... regularly'. 'Opted commerce' is ungrammatical; use 'chose commerce' or 'opted for commerce'. 'Science knowledge' is better as 'scientific knowledge'.

× However, I have a basic knowledge of science like knowing the temperature for instance, if I have some symptoms, I would recognize the disease that it might happen.

✓ However, I have a basic knowledge of science, such as knowing how to check temperature; for instance, if I have some symptoms, I can recognize what disease might be occurring.

Use 'such as' to introduce an example. 'Knowing the temperature' is vague; specify 'knowing how to check temperature'. 'Would recognize the disease that it might happen' is ungrammatical; use 'can recognize what disease might be occurring' to express ability in a present hypothetical.

× If I had another chance, I would definitely learn the biology and want to be a gynecologist as I am a woman and want to know more about the reproductive system.

✓ If I had another chance, I would definitely study biology and become a gynecologist because I am a woman and want to know more about the reproductive system.

Use 'study biology' rather than 'learn the biology'. 'Want to be a gynecologist' should be coordinated in conditional: 'would... become'. Also use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity.

× For instance, I want to gain more knowledge about the hormonal changes as a grown woman.

✓ For instance, I want to gain more knowledge about hormonal changes as an adult woman.

'A grown woman' is unnatural; use 'an adult woman'. 'The hormonal changes' can be 'hormonal changes' unless referring to specific ones.

× I want to manage menopause and fertility issues.

✓ I want to learn to manage menopause and fertility issues.

Add 'learn to' or 'be able to' to clarify intent; otherwise sentence is grammatical but more natural with 'learn to manage'.

× In India, it is dacrome of schools that a student had to study science at least until the 10th standard.

✓ In India, it is a requirement of schools that a student has to study science at least until the 10th standard.

'Dacrome' is not a word; likely intended 'requirement'. Use present 'has to' for general rule. 'A requirement of schools' is correct phrasing.

× But afterwards a person have its own choice whether he wants to go for this in the science field or not.

✓ But afterwards a person has their own choice whether they want to go into the science field or not.

Use 'has' to agree with singular 'person'. 'Its' is for objects; use 'their' for gender-neutral singular. 'Go for this in the science field' is awkward; use 'go into the science field'.

× I think it's quite crucial for every person to have the basic knowledge of.

✓ I think it's quite crucial for every person to have basic scientific knowledge.

Sentence ends with a preposition and lacks an object: 'have the basic knowledge of' is incomplete. Make it 'have basic scientific knowledge' for clarity.

× Honestly, no, I don't like watching science TV programs.

✓ Honestly, no, I don't like watching science TV programs.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× I'm not keen and fascinated by the science and technology that much rather than I want to watch more of fashion and business related content that allure me a lot in my life and I want to focus on my career.

✓ I'm not very keen on science and technology; rather, I prefer to watch fashion and business-related content that appeals to me, because I want to focus on my career.

'Keen and fascinated' is awkward; use 'keen on' or 'fascinated by'. 'That much rather than' is incorrect conjunction use; replace with '; rather,' or 'instead'. 'Allure me' is wrong verb form; use 'appeals to me'. Add hyphen 'business-related'. Split into clearer clauses for readability.