Internet— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, use correct tense and fewer fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Correct verb forms (e.g., "was" vs "used" and "made" vs "make"). Avoid repeating the same idea.

Ví dụ: I first started using the internet when I was in 10th grade. My father gave me a mobile phone then, so I created social media accounts and began using Facebook regularly.

Gợi ý: Give a direct frequency statement (daily/weekly) and explain briefly with specific actions. Remove fillers like "uh", "like" and correct grammar ("made my mind" → "made up my mind"). Use linking words for clarity.

Ví dụ: I go online every day, but much less than before. Previously I used to spend hours mindlessly scrolling, whereas now I only check social media for about 20 minutes a day because I decided to limit my screen time.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and form ("didn't allow" not "didn't allowed"). Give one specific reason the teacher gave and one brief outcome. Avoid fillers.

Ví dụ: Yes. In college my teacher asked us not to use the internet for a project and to rely on books and library resources instead. She wanted us to practise library research, so I spent several days consulting textbooks and journal articles.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct answer and one or two specific measures you took. Replace vague phrases ("perfect business person") with clearer goals and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect reasons and actions.

Ví dụ: Yes, I used to spend too much time online, mainly scrolling. Because I want to focus on building my business skills this year, I now limit social media to 30 minutes a day and use the extra time for online courses and planning.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give specific, varied activities with brief reasons why they are beneficial. Remove fillers and avoid repeating similar words. Use linking phrases to organise the list.

Ví dụ: Without the internet I would spend more time outdoors: playing cricket or badminton, going for runs, and doing workouts at the gym. I would also read more books and meet friends in person to socialise.

× I was in my 10th standard when I first used the Internet.

✓ I was in my 10th standard when I first used the internet.

Not a grammar number issue, but 'Internet' is not plural; case consistency: use lowercase 'internet' in general writing. Suggestion: use 'internet' consistently in lowercase.

× I know that it was the time when my father gifted me mobile phone and after that I just make the accounts on social media.

✓ I remember that it was when my father gifted me a mobile phone, and after that I just made accounts on social media.

Original mixes present 'know' with past events and uses base form 'make' instead of past 'made'. According to list, correct as present participle/past form issues: use past tense for completed actions. Also add article 'a' before 'mobile phone'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past events and include articles where needed.

× So it was the first time when I use Internet for using Facebook.

✓ So it was the first time I used the internet to use Facebook.

The sentence refers to a past event, so 'use' should be past 'used'. Also replace 'for using Facebook' with 'to use Facebook' for natural infinitive purpose. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame and use 'to' + verb for purpose.

× Well, uh, in the past days I often do like scrolling and other type of things but now I have make my mind to stop scrolling and just to like open the social media for like shorter period of time.

✓ Well, in the past I often scrolled and did other types of things, but now I have made up my mind to stop scrolling and just open social media for a shorter period of time.

Mixes present 'do' with past reference; 'do like scrolling' is informal and ungrammatical. Use past simple 'scrolled' for past habits. 'Have make my mind' should be present perfect 'have made up my mind'. Remove unnecessary filler 'like' and use 'a shorter period of time'. Suggestion: avoid fillers, use correct past forms and 'have made up my mind' for decisions.

× I am avoiding like to become a Internet person.

✓ I am trying to avoid becoming an internet person.

Use 'an' before vowel sound 'internet' and 'becoming' (gerund) after 'avoid'. 'Avoid to become' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'avoid' + gerund and correct article 'an'.

× Actually it was a time when I was in my college and I was making a project and uh, my teacher didn't allowed me to use Internet, she just told me to search it on like uh, books and other library resources instead of Internet.

✓ Actually, it was when I was in college and working on a project, and my teacher didn't allow me to use the internet; she told me to search in books and other library resources instead of the internet.

Use past 'allow' -> 'allowed' with auxiliary 'did' requires base form 'allow' not 'allowed' (didn't allowed is incorrect). Use 'in college' not 'in my college' (both acceptable but 'in college' is natural). Use articles 'the internet' and preposition 'in books'. Suggestion: after 'didn't' use base verb, and maintain article/preposition consistency.

× Yes, I used to spend too much time on the Internet for scrolling but nowadays I have set the goal to become a perfect business person in the next year.

✓ Yes, I used to spend a lot of time on the internet scrolling, but nowadays I have set a goal to become a successful businessperson next year.

'Used to' is fine for past habit; 'for scrolling' is awkward — use 'scrolling'. 'Perfect business person' is awkward; 'successful businessperson' is natural. 'In the next year' -> 'next year'. Suggestion: choose natural collocations and concise wording.

× So that's why I have just reduced the timings to use Internet because I just want to consume my time better.

✓ So that's why I have reduced the time I spend on the internet because I want to use my time better.

'Have just reduced the timings' is unnatural: use 'have reduced the time I spend'. 'Consume my time better' is awkward; use 'use my time better'. Also use 'the internet' consistently. Suggestion: use natural expressions for time and prefer 'use' over 'consume' for time.

× There are many activities that we can do without Internet like playing outdoor on uh grounds like cricket, badminton, tennis, hockey, anything.

✓ There are many activities we can do without the internet, like playing outdoor games such as cricket, badminton, tennis, or hockey.

Capitalize/lowercase 'internet' and add 'games' after 'outdoor'. 'Playing outdoor on grounds' is awkward; use 'playing outdoor games' or 'playing on grounds' and 'such as' before examples. Suggestion: use 'such as' for examples and plural 'games'.

× And we can also uh, do some workouts in the gym or in the open gym or garden.

✓ We can also do workouts in the gym or outdoors in a park or garden.

Avoid repetition 'gym or in the open gym'; use 'outdoors' and 'a park or garden'. Use articles where needed. Suggestion: simplify by using 'outdoors' and name locations correctly.