Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，避免重复表达。可以用更自然的表达方式描述生日活动，并且控制答案长度在5句以内。

Ví dụ: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends to spend time together. We often watch movies or play games, which makes the day fun and memorable. Spending time with friends always makes me feel happy and relaxed.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯，建议加强句子结构和时态的正确使用。回答时应直接回应问题，使用连词使内容连贯，并提供具体细节。

Ví dụ: When I was a child, my parents bought a cake a few days before my birthday. My mom would invite my friends over, and we would celebrate with games and laughter after dinner. These family celebrations created happy and unforgettable memories for me.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法和表达混乱的问题，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

Ví dụ: When I was younger, I thought birthdays were very important. However, now I see them as simple, happy moments. I usually prefer to spend my birthday quietly, relaxing and reflecting alone.

Gợi ý: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，建议注意句子结构和词汇选择，避免模糊表达。可以更清晰地说明原因和感受。

Ví dụ: I think my mom's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because she gave me life. I really appreciate everything she has done for me, so I want to make her happy on her special day. Celebrating her birthday shows my love and gratitude.

× On my birthday, I already invited all my friends to my husband run kick together.

✓ On my birthday, I already invited all my friends to run and kick with my husband together.

句中动词短语顺序错误，应该是“run and kick”，表示一起跑和踢球。动词时态正确，但表达不清晰。

× We often watch movies or play games which makes it a very fun and memorable.

✓ We often watch movies or play games which makes it very fun and memorable.

“a very fun and memorable”中“fun”是不可数形容词，不需要冠词“a”。

× When I was kid, my power and service bought a cake few days before my birthday.

✓ When I was a kid, my parents bought a cake a few days before my birthday.

“kid”前缺少冠词“a”，且“power and service”应为“parents”，表示父母。

× My mom who make a big deal out if by you inviting my friends over and we will celebrate together with games in laughter in the evening where you already had dinner.

✓ My mom made a big deal out of it by inviting my friends over, and we celebrated together with games and laughter in the evening after we had already had dinner.

句中时态错误，“make”应为过去式“made”；“out if”应为“out of it”；“you”应为“we”；句子结构混乱，需调整顺序使表达清晰。

× As a family which create marry hapiness hand unforgettable memories for me.

✓ As a family, it created many happy and unforgettable memories for me.

句子缺少主语和谓语，且单词拼写错误，“marry hapiness hand”应为“many happy”。

× Well, when I was younger I used to think that birthdays with the most crucial days for everyone.

✓ Well, when I was younger I used to think that birthdays were the most crucial days for everyone.

“birthdays with”应为“birthdays were”，动词与主语不一致。

× However, as I have grown and look I know see them is just simple, you know, happy moments in my life.

✓ However, as I have grown, I now see them as just simple, you know, happy moments in my life.

句中“look I know see them is”结构混乱，应改为“I now see them as”。

× For example, I usually prefer to spend my birthday quickly or going on so shape to relax and reflect without anyone.

✓ For example, I usually prefer to spend my birthday quietly or going on a trip to relax and reflect alone.

“quickly”用错，应为“quietly”；“so shape”应为“a trip”；“without anyone”表达不自然，改为“alone”。

× I think my mom's birthday the most important to celebrate in China because she's the first person who brought me into this world, which I really appreciate everything she has done for me.

✓ I think my mom's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because she's the first person who brought me into this world, and I really appreciate everything she has done for me.

句中缺少动词“is”，且“which”用法不当，应改为“and”。

× So I wanted to make her happy on her special day celebrating her birthday.

✓ So I want to make her happy on her special day by celebrating her birthday.

时态应保持一致，“wanted”改为“want”；缺少介词“by”引导方式状语。

× Either way, it will show my love and graduation.

✓ Either way, it will show my love and gratitude.

“graduation”用词错误，应为“gratitude”（感激）。