Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，建议简化句子结构，避免使用填充词如“uh”，并注意时态一致。可以更自然地表达日常习惯。

Ví dụ: I usually eat out with my friends and buy a birthday cake for myself on my birthday.

Gợi ý: 回答中有语法和表达不够流畅的问题，建议使用更简洁的句子，避免重复和填充词，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

Ví dụ: When I was a child, I spent my birthdays with my parents and relatives, who were always friendly and happy.

Gợi ý: 回答中有较多语法错误和不自然表达，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和填充词，明确表达观点并用连接词增强逻辑性。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it makes me feel special and allows me to take a break from my daily routine.

Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议注意人称代词和动词形式的正确使用，表达应更准确自然，并避免模糊的表达。

Ví dụ: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of Mao Zedong, the first national president, because he devoted his whole life to the country. Therefore, every Chinese person should remember him.

× I usually uh, I'm eating out with my friends and buy a birthday cake for myself, uh, in my birthday.

✓ I usually, uh, eat out with my friends and buy a birthday cake for myself on my birthday.

这里的习惯动作应该用一般现在时，不能用进行时。'I'm eating out' 应改为 'I eat out'。另外，'in my birthday' 应改为 'on my birthday'，因为表示具体日期时用介词 'on'。

× I usually uh, I'm eating out with my friends and buy a birthday cake for myself, uh, in my birthday.

✓ I usually, uh, eat out with my friends and buy a birthday cake for myself on my birthday.

表示具体日期时，应该用介词 'on'，而不是 'in'。所以 'in my birthday' 应改为 'on my birthday'。

× Uh, when I was a child and which is different from now is that I would, uh, spend the time in my birthday with my parents and my relatives.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, which is different from now, I would spend my birthday with my parents and my relatives.

原句结构混乱，'and which is different from now is that' 语法不正确，应拆分为两个分句，并调整语序，使句子通顺。

× Uh, when I was a child and which is different from now is that I would, uh, spend the time in my birthday with my parents and my relatives.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, which is different from now, I would spend my birthday with my parents and my relatives.

'spend the time in my birthday' 中 'in' 用法错误，表示在某一天应使用 'on'，且这里更自然的表达是 'spend my birthday'。

× They are really friendly and they're happy.

✓ They were really friendly and happy.

这里描述过去的情况，应该用过去时 'were'，且 'they' 指代复数，保持一致。

× They are really friendly and they're happy.

✓ They were really friendly and happy.

描述过去的情况，动词应使用过去时态。

× Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day, uh, when I was unique for umm with uh, uh, other peoples and I can just escape my daily routines in that day.

✓ Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day when I feel unique compared with other people, and I can just escape my daily routines on that day.

'when I was unique for with other peoples' 语法错误，'was' 应改为 'feel' 表达现在感受，'peoples' 是复数错误，正确为 'people'。另外，'in that day' 应改为 'on that day'。

× Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day, uh, when I was unique for umm with uh, uh, other peoples and I can just escape my daily routines in that day.

✓ Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day when I feel unique compared with other people, and I can just escape my daily routines on that day.

'in that day' 应改为 'on that day'，表示具体某一天用介词 'on'。

× Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day, uh, when I was unique for umm with uh, uh, other peoples and I can just escape my daily routines in that day.

✓ Uh, yes, I think celebrating my birthday is really important because it's the only day when I feel unique compared with other people, and I can just escape my daily routines on that day.

'peoples' 是复数错误，'people' 本身就是复数形式，不能加 's'。

× I think the most significant birthday for Chinese people is that our first national president Mao Zedong's birthday, because he devoted her his full life for Chinese contribution.

✓ I think the most significant birthday for Chinese people is our first national president Mao Zedong's birthday, because he devoted his whole life to China's development.

'he devoted her his full life' 中 'her' 用错，应该去掉。'full life' 更自然表达为 'whole life'。'for Chinese contribution' 语法不通，应改为 'to China's development'。

× So every Chinese should memory these people.

✓ So every Chinese should remember these people.

'memory' 是名词，动词应使用 'remember'。