Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the sentence structure clearer. For example, avoid repeating words like 'after' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences for better clarity.

Ví dụ: On my birthday, I usually wake up early and take a quick bath. Then, my mother and I visit the temple to pray for good health and happiness. This tradition makes the day feel special and peaceful.

Gợi ý: Your answer has good content but contains some repetition and lacks linking words. Try to avoid repeating words like 'by' and use linking words such as 'and' or 'also' to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details within 5 sentences.

Ví dụ: When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with three friends. We shared chocolates, wore new clothes, and had fun by dancing and singing together.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to connect ideas. For example, instead of repeating 'family members', use pronouns or synonyms. Also, try to make your sentences concise and within 5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday with family and friends is important because it brings everyone together and creates lasting memories. It also allows us to spend quality time and strengthen our relationships.

Gợi ý: Your answer is honest but lacks content and structure. Try to respond directly to the question with a topic sentence, and if you don't know, you can say so briefly and add a related opinion or prediction. Avoid repeating words and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ví dụ: I am not very familiar with how birthdays are celebrated in China. However, I think that in many cultures, celebrating the birthdays of close family members is very important. I would like to learn more about Chinese traditions in the future.

× I usually wake up early in the morning on my birthday after and after having a quick bath, my mother and I go to visit temple to worship for good health and happiness in our life.

✓ I usually wake up early in the morning on my birthday, and after having a quick bath, my mother and I go to visit the temple to worship for good health and happiness in our life.

The sentence has incorrect preposition use and missing articles. 'Go to visit temple' should be 'go to visit the temple' because 'temple' is a specific place here. Also, the phrase 'after and after having' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'and after having'. Adding a comma improves clarity.

× I remember that in my birthday we used to celebrate birthday with my three friends by by sharing chocolates, wearing new clothes, having fun, by dancing, singing.

✓ I remember that on my birthday we used to celebrate with my three friends by sharing chocolates, wearing new clothes, having fun, dancing, and singing.

The phrase 'in my birthday' should be 'on my birthday' (preposition correction). Also, 'celebrate birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'celebrate' or 'celebrate the birthday'. The repeated 'by' is redundant. The list should be parallel and properly connected with 'and'.

× I remember that in my birthday we used to celebrate birthday with my three friends by by sharing chocolates, wearing new clothes, having fun, by dancing, singing.

✓ I remember that on my birthday we used to celebrate with my three friends by sharing chocolates, wearing new clothes, having fun, dancing, and singing.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'birthday'; it should be 'on my birthday'. Also, the repeated 'by' is incorrect and should be removed for clarity.

× I think it is more important for me to celebrate my birthday with my family and friends because I believe it will gather all my family members and create memories for the future too.

✓ I think it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday with my family and friends because I believe it will bring all my family members together and create memories for the future too.

The phrase 'more important' is comparative but no comparison is made; 'very important' fits better here. Also, 'gather all my family members' is awkward; 'bring all my family members together' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× It will make quality time with my family members.

✓ It will create quality time with my family members.

The verb 'make' is not typically used with 'quality time'; 'create' is more appropriate. This is a collocation issue related to verb-preposition usage.

× Personally I don't have any idea about celebrating birthday in China how the how the Chinese people celebrate their close ones, but I will definitely Google it for my good information.

✓ Personally, I don't have any idea about how Chinese people celebrate birthdays of their close ones in China, but I will definitely Google it for good information.

The sentence has pronoun and word order issues. 'Celebrating birthday in China how the how the Chinese people celebrate their close ones' is confusing and incorrect. It should be reordered to 'how Chinese people celebrate birthdays of their close ones in China'. Also, 'my good information' is incorrect; 'good information' suffices.