Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, instead of 'we do much thing,' specify activities you do. Also, try to connect ideas smoothly using linking words.

Ví dụ: I usually celebrate my birthday with two parties. First, I have a fun sleepover with my friends where we play games and watch movies. Then, I have another gathering with my family and close relatives to enjoy a meal together.

Gợi ý: Your answer is understandable but incomplete and somewhat repetitive. Try to finish your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'that was a nice atmosphere' without elaboration.

Ví dụ: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family and close relatives. We would buy a cake, put candles on it, and I would blow them out. Afterwards, we played music and danced together, which made the celebration very joyful.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but contains some redundancy and awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to improve flow. Also, clarify your reasons with more specific details.

Ví dụ: I think celebrating birthdays is important because it only happens once a year. While some people may not care about their birthdays, I appreciate them since it's a special day when I feel loved and cared for by others.

Gợi ý: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and provide more specific reasons. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'mothers are like some angels' without explanation.

Ví dụ: Although I don't know much about Chinese traditions, I believe that celebrating mothers' birthdays is very important in China because mothers play a vital role in the family and deserve appreciation for their love and care.

× I always have two celebrations for my birthday.

✓ I always have two celebrations on my birthday.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used here; the correct preposition to indicate the occasion is 'on'. This is a preposition error, but since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes listed, this is a minor issue. However, the sentence is acceptable as is. No plural or singular issue here, so no correction needed.

× it's a gathering with my friends that we do much thing and we have a sleepover at night, so I really love it.

✓ It's a gathering with my friends where we do many things and have a sleepover at night, so I really love it.

The phrase 'much thing' is incorrect because 'thing' is countable and should be pluralized as 'things' with the quantifier 'many' instead of 'much'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1). Also, 'that' should be 'where' to correctly connect the clause, but this is a sentence structure issue which is not corrected here.

× And we have another party which my close relatives and my family that is kind of.

✓ And we have another party with my close relatives and my family; it is kind of special.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a proper verb and structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). The phrase 'which my close relatives and my family that is kind of' is ungrammatical and needs rephrasing to be clear.

× As I was young, I only had one celebration.

✓ When I was young, I only had one celebration.

The phrase 'As I was young' is incorrect for indicating past time; 'When I was young' is the correct expression. This is a past tense issue (ID 5) related to temporal clauses.

× Well, we bought a cake and put candles on that and I blow out the candles and we play music and dance together and that was a nice atmosphere and I really.

✓ Well, we bought a cake and put candles on it, and I blew out the candles, and we played music and danced together. It was a nice atmosphere, and I really enjoyed it.

The verbs 'blow', 'play', and 'dance' should be in the past tense to match the past narrative. 'Blow' should be 'blew', 'play' should be 'played', and 'dance' should be 'danced'. Also, 'that' should be 'it' referring to the cake. The sentence was incomplete and needed finishing. These are past tense issues (ID 5).

× Although there are some people who don't care about their birthdays, but I can't understand them because birthdays are important for me because I can see that people care about me in that day.

✓ Although there are some people who don't care about their birthdays, I can't understand them because birthdays are important to me since I can see that people care about me on that day.

Using both 'Although' and 'but' together is redundant and incorrect. One should be removed. Also, 'important for me' should be 'important to me', and 'in that day' should be 'on that day'. The main error is the incorrect conjunction use (ID 16).

× I don't know much about Chinese people but I can say Chinese mothers are important symbol for Chinese people and they should always celebrate the mother's birthday because the mothers are like some angels and.

✓ I don't know much about Chinese people, but I can say Chinese mothers are an important symbol for Chinese people, and they should always celebrate the mother's birthday because mothers are like angels.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'Important symbol' needs the article 'an'. 'The mothers' should be 'mothers' as a general statement. The sentence is incomplete and needs finishing. The main issue is incorrect use of pronouns and articles (ID 12 and 22).