Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear words (e.g., 'prisons' instead of 'presents'). Try to use clearer vocabulary and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

Ví dụ: On my birthday, I usually have a small gathering with my family at home. We cut the cake and open presents together. We also share stories, laugh, and look through old family photos to recall memories.

Gợi ý: Your answer covers many details but lacks clear structure and has some grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases. Also, try to use past tense consistently when talking about past events.

Ví dụ: When I was young, my family often took me on outings to places like theaters, museums, and the zoo. My parents also made my favorite dishes. I enjoyed cutting the cake, opening presents, and dancing and singing with my friends and family.

Gợi ý: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good vocabulary. To improve, avoid starting sentences with 'but' after 'although' and try to add a linking phrase to make your argument more coherent.

Ví dụ: Although some people think a birthday is just another day, I believe it is a remarkable way to celebrate personal milestones. It allows us to reflect on the past and set goals for the future. Therefore, celebrating birthdays is important.

Gợi ý: Your answer has good ideas but some sentences are unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to use simpler sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

Ví dụ: In China, I think parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because our culture honors parents. They are often not given gifts as much as children, so birthdays are a good chance to appreciate their sacrifices and upbringing.

× We'll have a small gatherings with my family at my home.

✓ We'll have a small gathering with my family at my home.

The word 'gatherings' is plural but 'a small' indicates singular. The noun should be singular 'gathering' to match the singular article 'a small'.

× I would cut my cake as well as open some prisons.

✓ I would cut my cake as well as open some presents.

The word 'prisons' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'presents'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects meaning and clarity.

× So we wait, go for outing, my family would take me for the outing, like theaters, museums, and maybe sometimes we would also go in the zoo and my parents would make me favorite dishes, I would cut my cake, I would open my presents and similarly I would also enjoy just dancing and singing with my friends and family.

✓ So we would go for outings, my family would take me for outings, like theaters, museums, and maybe sometimes we would also go to the zoo and my parents would make my favorite dishes, I would cut my cake, I would open my presents and similarly I would also enjoy just dancing and singing with my friends and family.

The word 'outing' should be plural 'outings' to match the context of multiple events. Also, 'go in the zoo' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to the zoo'. 'Make me favorite dishes' should be 'make my favorite dishes' to use the correct possessive pronoun.

× maybe sometimes we would also go in the zoo

✓ maybe sometimes we would also go to the zoo

The correct preposition with 'go' when referring to a place is 'to', not 'in'. 'Go to the zoo' is the correct phrase.

× my parents would make me favorite dishes

✓ my parents would make my favorite dishes

The possessive pronoun 'my' should be used to indicate that the dishes belong to the speaker, not the object pronoun 'me'.

× Although some people think that birthday is just another day, but I think it is a remarkable way to celebrate your personal milestone.

✓ Although some people think that a birthday is just another day, I think it is a remarkable way to celebrate your personal milestone.

Using both 'Although' and 'but' together is redundant. Also, 'birthday' should be preceded by the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I think parents put their one of the most important birthday because in our culture parents are honored and they are celebrated throughout and I think parents are not given gifts quite too often as compared to children.

✓ I think parents have one of the most important birthdays because in our culture parents are honored and they are celebrated throughout, and I think parents are not given gifts quite as often as children.

The phrase 'put their one of the most important birthday' is incorrect. It should be 'have one of the most important birthdays'. Also, 'quite too often' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'quite as often'. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× So it would be a good chance to give them some birthday and appreciate them for their sacrifices and their upbringing.

✓ So it would be a good chance to give them some birthday gifts and appreciate them for their sacrifices and their upbringing.

The phrase 'give them some birthday' is incomplete. It should be 'give them some birthday gifts' to specify what is being given.