Birthday— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ví dụ: On my birthday, I usually invite many friends, so I am quite busy. First, we sing the happy birthday song together, and then we enjoy some food and games.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and clarify your ideas.

Ví dụ: When I was young, I always started my birthday party by singing the happy birthday song with my friends, which made the atmosphere cheerful. After that, I enjoyed tasting various foods with them.

Gợi ý: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Provide a clear opinion in the topic sentence, then explain your reasons with linking words. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

Ví dụ: When I was young, I thought celebrating my birthday was very important because I enjoyed the attention. However, now I feel it is less important as I prefer to spend time quietly.

Gợi ý: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Give a direct response to the question, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

Ví dụ: In China, I believe it is important to celebrate everyone's birthday because birthdays are special memories in a person's life and help strengthen relationships.

× On my birthday I need to invite too many friends so I'm so busy in this time.

✓ On my birthday I need to invite too many friends so I'm so busy at this time.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'this time'. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to a specific point or period in time, so it should be 'at this time'.

× Then in at the beginning I'm I'm always sing happy birthday song with my friend and test.

✓ Then at the beginning I'm always singing the happy birthday song with my friends and guests.

The phrase 'in at the beginning' is incorrect; only 'at the beginning' is needed. Also, 'sing' should be in the '-ing' form after 'I'm' to indicate a continuous action. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context, and 'test' seems to be a misused word, likely intended as 'guests' or similar.

× Then in at the beginning I'm I'm always sing happy birthday song with my friend and test.

✓ Then at the beginning I'm always singing the happy birthday song with my friends and guests.

After 'I'm' (I am), the verb should be in the '-ing' form to indicate present continuous tense, so 'sing' should be 'singing'.

× Then in at the beginning I'm I'm always sing happy birthday song with my friend and test.

✓ Then at the beginning I'm always singing the happy birthday song with my friends and guests.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' because more than one friend is implied. 'Test' is likely a typo or incorrect word; 'guests' fits the context better.

× At the beginning of the party, I always sang the happy birthday song together, which made the atmosphere more cheerful and I would then I will test I would taste the food with my friends, which made me.

✓ At the beginning of the party, I always sang the happy birthday song together, which made the atmosphere more cheerful, and then I would taste the food with my friends, which made me happy.

The phrase 'I will test I would taste' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'then I would taste' to maintain past habitual action. Also, the sentence was incomplete; adding 'happy' completes the thought.

× At the beginning of the party, I always sang the happy birthday song together, which made the atmosphere more cheerful and I would then I will test I would taste the food with my friends, which made me.

✓ At the beginning of the party, I always sang the happy birthday song together, which made the atmosphere more cheerful, and then I would taste the food with my friends, which made me happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repeated and misplaced phrases. Correcting the sentence structure improves clarity and coherence.

× When I was young, I thought that celebrating my birthday is so important because I was an extravagant person but now when I'm older, I think celebrating my birthday is not important because it's.

✓ When I was young, I thought that celebrating my birthday was very important because I was an extravagant person, but now that I'm older, I think celebrating my birthday is not important because it isn't.

The tense should be consistent: 'thought' (past) pairs with 'was' (past) not 'is' (present). Also, 'because it's' is incomplete and should be 'because it isn't' to complete the negative thought.

× When I was young, I thought that celebrating my birthday is so important because I was an extravagant person but now when I'm older, I think celebrating my birthday is not important because it's.

✓ When I was young, I thought that celebrating my birthday was very important because I was an extravagant person, but now that I'm older, I think celebrating my birthday is not important because it isn't.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'because it's' which is incomplete. Completing the sentence with 'because it isn't' clarifies the meaning.

× I think each person also need to celebrate birthdays because the birthday, the birthday is one of the most favorable memory in your life, in their life, in their life.

✓ I think each person also needs to celebrate birthdays because the birthday is one of the most favourable memories in your life, in their life.

'Each person' is singular and requires the singular verb 'needs'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' to match 'one of the most'. The repeated phrase 'in their life' is redundant and should be stated once.

× I think each person also need to celebrate birthdays because the birthday, the birthday is one of the most favorable memory in your life, in their life, in their life.

✓ I think each person also needs to celebrate birthdays because the birthday is one of the most favourable memories in your life, in their life.

The pronouns 'your' and 'their' are mixed inconsistently. It's better to use 'your' or 'their' consistently to avoid confusion. Also, the repeated phrase is unnecessary.