Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like perfume?
Thí sinh
Yes, I love perfume's in a weird different fragrance in my daily life. For example I often use brand like Chanel or Barbary because their sense really make me feel elegant and confidence. And also these perfumes can always bring me a sense of hapiness.
Giám khảo
Do you use perfume in your daily life?
Thí sinh
Well, I sometimes use perfume's in my daily life is specially during Simon important gatherings or parties because I use perfumes in order to make me feel more attractive and gorgeous.
Giám khảo
Will you buy perfume as a gift?
Thí sinh
Yes, I would like to choose perfume as a gift because you know my friend, she is a perfume lover and she has collected all kinds of brand perfume and she really likes some special on fragrance of the perfume.
Giám khảo
Do you think perfumes are expensive?
Thí sinh
Well it depends I think because most of the perfume's have brands that fairly expensive. However there is a little amounts of perfume set to do not have brands and it's only about 100 I think.
Do you like perfume?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误,如“perfume's”应为“perfumes”,“Barbary”应为“Burberry”,“hapiness”应为“happiness”。句子结构不够自然,表达不够简洁。建议注意单复数形式,拼写准确,并使用更自然的表达方式。
Ví dụ: Yes, I love wearing perfumes with unique fragrances in my daily life. For example, I often use brands like Chanel or Burberry because their scents make me feel elegant and confident. These perfumes also bring me a sense of happiness.
Do you use perfume in your daily life?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,如“perfume's”应为“perfumes”,“Simon”可能是“some”的拼写错误。句子结构不清晰,表达重复。建议简化句子,注意拼写和语法,避免重复表达。
Ví dụ: I sometimes wear perfumes in my daily life, especially during important gatherings or parties, because they help me feel more attractive and confident.
Will you buy perfume as a gift?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答表达较为冗长且有语法错误,如“all kinds of brand perfume”应为“all kinds of branded perfumes”,“some special on fragrance”应为“some special fragrances”。建议简化句子,注意语法和词汇搭配,使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would choose perfume as a gift because my friend is a perfume lover who has collected many branded perfumes. She really appreciates unique fragrances.
Do you think perfumes are expensive?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法和表达错误较多,如“perfume's”应为“perfumes”,“a little amounts”应为“a small number”,“set to do not have brands”表达不清。建议使用更准确的表达,注意语法和词汇搭配,避免模糊不清。
Ví dụ: Well, I think it depends. Most branded perfumes are quite expensive, but there are some unbranded perfumes that cost only about 100 units of currency.
× Yes, I love perfume's in a weird different fragrance in my daily life.
✓ Yes, I love perfumes with weird different fragrances in my daily life.
这里的 perfume's 是错误的复数形式,正确的复数形式是 perfumes。'perfume's' 是所有格形式,不适用于此处。
× Yes, I love perfume's in a weird different fragrance in my daily life.
✓ Yes, I love perfumes with weird different fragrances in my daily life.
形容词顺序错误,应该是 'different weird fragrances' 或者 'weird different fragrances',但更自然的表达是 'weird different fragrances'。
× For example I often use brand like Chanel or Barbary because their sense really make me feel elegant and confidence.
✓ For example, I often use brands like Chanel or Burberry because their scents really make me feel elegant and confident.
brand 应该用复数 brands,因为提到了多个品牌。Barbary 拼写错误,应为 Burberry。sense 应为 scents,表示香味。confidence 是名词,需用形容词 confident。
× For example I often use brand like Chanel or Barbary because their sense really make me feel elegant and confidence.
✓ For example, I often use brands like Chanel or Burberry because their scents really make me feel elegant and confident.
形容词 elegant 和 confident 用来修饰感受,confidence 是名词,需改为形容词 confident。
× And also these perfumes can always bring me a sense of hapiness.
✓ And also these perfumes can always bring me a sense of happiness.
hapiness 拼写错误,正确拼写为 happiness。
× Well, I sometimes use perfume's in my daily life is specially during Simon important gatherings or parties because I use perfumes in order to make me feel more attractive and gorgeous.
✓ Well, I sometimes use perfumes in my daily life, especially during some important gatherings or parties because I use perfumes to make me feel more attractive and gorgeous.
perfume's 是错误的复数形式,应为 perfumes。specially 应为 especially。Simon 拼写错误,应为 some。句子结构需调整以更通顺。
× Well, I sometimes use perfume's in my daily life is specially during Simon important gatherings or parties because I use perfumes in order to make me feel more attractive and gorgeous.
✓ Well, I sometimes use perfumes in my daily life, especially during some important gatherings or parties because I use perfumes to make me feel more attractive and gorgeous.
in order to 后面接动词原形,不能用 make me,应该用 to make me。
× Yes, I would like to choose perfume as a gift because you know my friend, she is a perfume lover and she has collected all kinds of brand perfume and she really likes some special on fragrance of the perfume.
✓ Yes, I would like to choose perfume as a gift because, you know, my friend is a perfume lover and she has collected all kinds of brand perfumes and she really likes some special fragrances of the perfume.
brand perfume 应为 brand perfumes,表示多种品牌的香水。some special on fragrance 结构错误,应为 some special fragrances。
× Yes, I would like to choose perfume as a gift because you know my friend, she is a perfume lover and she has collected all kinds of brand perfume and she really likes some special on fragrance of the perfume.
✓ Yes, I would like to choose perfume as a gift because, you know, my friend is a perfume lover and she has collected all kinds of brand perfumes and she really likes some special fragrances of the perfume.
介词 on 用法错误,描述香味时应直接用 fragrance 或 fragrances,不需要 on。
× Well it depends I think because most of the perfume's have brands that fairly expensive.
✓ Well, it depends, I think, because most of the perfumes have brands that are fairly expensive.
perfume's 是错误的复数形式,应为 perfumes。缺少动词 are。
× Well it depends I think because most of the perfume's have brands that fairly expensive.
✓ Well, it depends, I think, because most of the perfumes have brands that are fairly expensive.
句子缺少逗号分隔,且缺少动词 are,导致句子结构不完整。
× However there is a little amounts of perfume set to do not have brands and it's only about 100 I think.
✓ However, there are a small number of perfume sets that do not have brands and they cost only about 100, I think.
amounts 是复数,前面用 little 不搭配,应改为 a small number。perfume set 应为 perfume sets。句子结构需调整。