Perfume— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は質問に対して直接的ですが、言い回しが不自然で冗長な部分があります。例えば、「the smell always disrupted my, uh, healthy work」という表現は意味が不明瞭で、より明確に「the smell distracts me when I work」などと表現すると良いでしょう。また、繰り返しの「umm」や「uh」は避け、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

Ví dụ: No, I don't like the fragrance of perfume because it distracts me when I am working, especially when I am writing articles or checking content.

Gợi ý: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「for make me enjoyable and happy」は誤りで、「to make me feel happy and enjoy myself」などと表現すると良いでしょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。

Ví dụ: I don't usually use perfume, but sometimes I wear it to motivate myself or when I go on a date with my wife to feel happy and enjoy the moment.

Gợi ý: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。「I don't sound」は意味が通じませんし、「waiters」は文脈に合いません。正しくは「I don't think so because perfume is very expensive as a gift. Instead, I prefer to choose flowers or chocolates because they are more affordable.」のように具体的で正確な表現を心がけましょう。

Ví dụ: No, I don't think I will buy perfume as a gift because it is quite expensive. Instead, I prefer to give flowers or chocolates since they are more affordable.

Gợi ý: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法と語彙の誤りがあります。「Channel」は「Chanel」が正しいブランド名ですし、「processes will be complicated」は不自然です。「the production process is complicated」などと表現すると良いでしょう。より具体的に説明すると効果的です。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think perfumes are expensive mainly because famous brands like Louis Vuitton or Chanel produce them, and the production process is complicated, which increases the price.

× No, I don't like fragrance of the perfume, umm, because the smell always disrupted my, uh, healthy work, uh, I cannot concentrate on writing articles and umm, checking the contents, umm, by umm, the atmosphere and the smell perfume.

✓ No, I don't like the fragrance of perfume, umm, because the smell always disrupts my, uh, healthy work, uh, I cannot concentrate on writing articles and, umm, checking the contents, umm, because of, umm, the atmosphere and the smell of perfume.

The phrase 'fragrance of the perfume' needs the definite article 'the' before 'fragrance' and 'perfume' should not have 'the' when speaking generally. 'Disrupted' should be 'disrupts' to match present tense. 'By umm, the atmosphere and the smell perfume' is incorrect; it should be 'because of the atmosphere and the smell of perfume' to correctly use prepositions.

× No, I don't like fragrance of the perfume, umm, because the smell always disrupted my, uh, healthy work, uh, I cannot concentrate on writing articles and umm, checking the contents, umm, by umm, the atmosphere and the smell perfume.

✓ No, I don't like the fragrance of perfume, umm, because the smell always disrupts my, uh, healthy work, uh, I cannot concentrate on writing articles and, umm, checking the contents, umm, because of, umm, the atmosphere and the smell of perfume.

The verb 'disrupted' is in the past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense 'disrupts' to indicate a habitual action.

× I don't usually use a perfume but when I want to be motivated myself or I want to go dating with my wife, I sometimes use that for make me enjoyable and happy.

✓ I don't usually use perfume but when I want to motivate myself or I want to go on a date with my wife, I sometimes use it to make me feel enjoyable and happy.

'A perfume' is incorrect when speaking generally; 'perfume' without an article is correct. 'Go dating' should be 'go on a date'. 'Use that for make me enjoyable' is incorrect; it should be 'use it to make me feel enjoyable and happy'.

× I don't usually use a perfume but when I want to be motivated myself or I want to go dating with my wife, I sometimes use that for make me enjoyable and happy.

✓ I don't usually use perfume but when I want to motivate myself or I want to go on a date with my wife, I sometimes use it to make me feel enjoyable and happy.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrect here; 'it' should be used to refer to perfume. Also, 'motivated myself' should be 'motivate myself'.

× No, I don't sound because it seems I'm very high price for a gift. Instead I like to choose flowers and waiters for a gift because it is not so expensive.

✓ No, I don't think so because it seems very expensive for a gift. Instead, I like to choose flowers and waiters as gifts because they are not so expensive.

'I don't sound' is incorrect; 'I don't think so' is appropriate. 'I'm very high price' is incorrect; 'it seems very expensive' is correct. 'For a gift' is acceptable but 'as gifts' is better when referring to flowers and waiters. 'Waiters' is likely a mishearing or typo; possibly 'wafers' or 'sweets' was intended, but correction is limited to grammar.

× No, I don't sound because it seems I'm very high price for a gift. Instead I like to choose flowers and waiters for a gift because it is not so expensive.

✓ No, I don't think so because it seems very expensive for a gift. Instead, I like to choose flowers and waiters as gifts because they are not so expensive.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'flowers and waiters'; 'they' should be used instead.

× Yes, I think so. And this is mainly because very well known companies such as Louis Vuitton or Channel use the perfumes and processes will be complicated which makes the price very high.

✓ Yes, I think so. And this is mainly because very well-known companies such as Louis Vuitton or Chanel use perfumes and the processes are complicated, which makes the price very high.

'Use the perfumes' should be 'use perfumes' without 'the' when speaking generally. 'Processes will be complicated' should be 'the processes are complicated' to match present tense and clarity. 'Channel' is corrected to 'Chanel' as the brand name.