Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like perfume?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do like perfume. Actually I use some perfumes in daily. I prefer the flowers, smell of flowers and I can say that I do not like smelling.
Giám khảo
Do you use perfume in your daily life?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do use paraffin in my daily life, I prefer the smell of flowers and I bought some UMM brands but they are really expensive so I can buy them when I go abroad.
Giám khảo
Will you buy perfume as a gift?
Thí sinh
Actually, I don't buy perfume as a gift because people don't like the smell of the gift and and this makes me upset.
Giám khảo
Do you think perfumes are expensive?
Thí sinh
Yes, they are really expensive and the most beautiful which is have most beautiful smell. They are really expensive uh in Turkey, the umm euro and dollar is so high, so we.
Do you like perfume?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Cevap doğrudan soruyu yanıtlıyor ancak dilbilgisi hataları, anlamsal belirsizlik ve tekrarlamalar var. Cümleleri daha doğal hale getirmek için şu noktalara dikkat edin: 1) Daha doğru kelime seçimi (örn. "daily" yerine "every day", "the flowers" yerine "floral scents"). 2) Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve cümleleri basit tutun (maksimum 5 cümle). 3) Kısa bir konu cümlesi kullanıp ardından bir veya iki destekleyici detay ekleyin. 4) Bağlaçlarla akışı iyileştirin (for example, because).
Ví dụ: Yes, I like perfume. I wear a light floral scent almost every day because it makes me feel fresh. For example, I prefer perfumes with jasmine or rose notes rather than strong musky smells.
Do you use perfume in your daily life?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Cevap yeterince bilgi veriyor fakat kelime hataları ("paraffin" yanlış kullanım), uzun karmaşık cümleler ve net olmayan marka bilgisi mevcut. Daha açık ve doğru kelime kullanın, cümleleri bölün ve nedenleri ekleyin. Ayrıca bağlaçlarla mantıksal akışı sağlayın (for example, because, so).
Ví dụ: Yes, I use perfume every day. I usually choose floral fragrances because they are light and pleasant. I buy some international brands when I travel abroad because they are cheaper there.
Will you buy perfume as a gift?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Cevap doğrudan ve nettir ancak tekrarlama ("and and") ve daha fazla açıklama eksik. Nedenini kısaca açıklayın ve bir alternatif önerin. Bağlaçlarla fikirleri bağlayın (for example, so, therefore).
Ví dụ: I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because scent preferences are very personal. Therefore, I prefer giving items like chocolates or gift cards to avoid giving something the recipient might not like.
Do you think perfumes are expensive?
Điểm: 54.0Gợi ý: Cevap düşünceyi aktarıyor fakat dilbilgisi hataları, anlamsal düzensizlik ve cümle tamamlanmamış. Daha açık, tutarlı cümleler kurun: önce görüşünüzü belirtin, sonra gerekçeyle destekleyin ve bir sonuç cümlesi ekleyin. Sayısal veya karşılaştırmalı örnek verin (for example, compared to other countries).
Ví dụ: Yes, I think many perfumes are expensive. In Turkey, prices are high because of import taxes and the exchange rate, so I usually wait to buy them abroad where they cost less.
× Do you like perfume?
✓ Do you like perfume?
There is an extra space between the article and noun; remove the extra space so 'perfume' follows normally. Use no article when speaking generally about an uncountable noun like 'perfume' in this question.
× Yes, I do like perfume. Actually I use some perfumes in daily.
✓ Yes, I do like perfume. Actually I use some perfumes daily.
The phrase 'in daily' is incorrect. Use the adverb 'daily' after the object to indicate frequency: 'use some perfumes daily.' Also prefer 'perfume' (uncountable) for general like; 'some perfumes' is acceptable when referring to specific bottles.
× I prefer the flowers, smell of flowers and I can say that I do not like smelling.
✓ I prefer the smell of flowers, and I would say that I do not like strong scents.
The original mixes nouns awkwardly ('the flowers, smell of flowers') and uses 'smelling' incorrectly. Use the noun phrase 'the smell of flowers' and a clearer expression for dislike, e.g., 'I do not like strong scents.' This corrects word order and word choice.
× Do you use perfume in your daily life?
✓ Do you use perfume in your daily life?
This sentence is already correct. 'Do you use' is the correct present simple question form to ask about habitual actions.
× Yes, I do use paraffin in my daily life, I prefer the smell of flowers and I bought some UMM brands but they are really expensive so I can buy them when I go abroad.
✓ Yes, I use paraffin in my daily life. I prefer floral scents, and I bought some UMM brand perfumes, but they are really expensive so I buy them when I go abroad.
Run-on sentence and article/word choice problems. Split into two sentences. 'I do use' can be simplified to 'I use.' Use 'floral scents' instead of 'the smell of flowers.' 'UMM brands' should be 'UMM brand perfumes' or 'UMM brand' for clarity. Replace 'so I can buy them' with 'so I buy them' to match habitual action.
× Will you buy perfume as a gift?
✓ Will you buy perfume as a gift?
This question is grammatically correct; 'Will you' correctly asks about a future intention.
× Actually, I don't buy perfume as a gift because people don't like the smell of the gift and and this makes me upset.
✓ Actually, I don't buy perfume as a gift because people often don't like the scent, and this makes me upset.
Use 'often' to indicate frequency and 'scent' is a better noun than 'smell of the gift.' Remove the duplicated 'and.' Keep present simple for habitual actions.
× Do you think perfumes are expensive?
✓ Do you think perfumes are expensive?
The sentence is correct as a present simple question about general opinion; no change needed.
× Yes, they are really expensive and the most beautiful which is have most beautiful smell.
✓ Yes, they are really expensive and the most beautiful ones have the nicest scents.
Original sentence has incorrect relative clause and word order. Use 'the most beautiful ones' to refer back to 'perfumes' and 'have the nicest scents' to describe smell. 'Nicest scents' is more natural than 'most beautiful smell.'
× They are really expensive uh in Turkey, the umm euro and dollar is so high, so we.
✓ They are really expensive in Turkey because the euro and dollar are so strong, so we buy them less often.
Fix sentence fragment and subject-verb agreement: 'euro and dollar are' (plural). Replace filler sounds and complete the thought by explaining the consequence: 'we buy them less often.' Use 'strong' or 'high' for currency value; ensure full clause.