Perfume— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid extra sounds (e.g., “MMM”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “so”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I have synesthesia, so certain scents trigger strong memories for me, which is why I enjoy collecting perfumes. For example, a marine-scented fragrance always reminds me of childhood holidays, so I keep a small collection to revisit those memories.

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct small mistakes, be precise and logical. Start with a direct answer, then give two concise supporting details linked clearly. Avoid unclear references (e.g., “Blue Muscles”) and repetition of the word “perfume.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I usually wear Blue Mask Zest from The Body Shop every day because it is vegan and has bright citrus notes that energize me. For example, its fresh scent always reminds me of the summer I finished my last bottle.

Gợi ý: Good structure and relevance. Make the response slightly more natural by tightening language and adding a short example to support your point. Use a linking phrase such as “because” or “for instance.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I would, but only if I know the recipient well because scent is very personal. For instance, I once bought a floral perfume for a close friend who loves flowers, and she appreciated the thoughtfulness.

Gợi ý: Fix small grammar and phrasing errors and avoid vague phrases like “admired them from apart.” Begin with a direct answer, provide a reason, and finish with a brief personal judgment. Use linking words such as “however” or “therefore.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I think many high-quality perfumes are expensive; however, I see them as an investment in my personal style. Therefore, I sometimes save up for a signature scent because it boosts my confidence and lasts a long time.

× 'I like perfumes and fragrances of all kinds.'

✓ 'I like perfume and fragrances of all kinds.'

'Perfume' can be used as an uncountable noun when speaking generally; using the plural 'perfumes' is not wrong but slightly shifts meaning to individual bottles. If the student means the general concept or types, use uncountable 'perfume' for clarity.'

× 'It reminds me of the summer I finished my bottle of Blue Muscles recently.'

✓ 'It reminds me of the summer when I finished my bottle of Blue Mask recently.'

'Finished' is past tense and 'recently' is acceptable, but the sentence lacked a clear temporal connector. Use 'when' to link the summer and the action. Also 'Blue Muscles' appears to be a typo for 'Blue Mask,' so correct the product name for accuracy.'

× 'I admired them from apart.'

✓ 'I admired them from afar.'

'From apart' is incorrect English. The correct idiom is 'from afar,' meaning at a distance. Use 'from afar' when you mean you looked on or appreciated something from a distance.'

× 'it has very bright citrusy notes.'

✓ 'It has very bright, citrusy notes.'

The original sentence is mostly correct tense-wise, but punctuation is needed: add a comma between adjectives 'bright' and 'citrusy' to separate coordinate adjectives. This is an adjective order/punctuation issue closely tied to present-tense description.'

× 'I would buy perfume for a person I am acquainted with and I know their tastes and likes, so that it is a personal and intimate gesture.'

✓ 'I would buy perfume for a person I am acquainted with and whose tastes I know, so that it is a personal and intimate gesture.'

The clause 'a person I am acquainted with and I know their tastes' mixes subjects and creates a pronoun reference issue. Use a relative pronoun 'whose' to correctly link 'person' with 'tastes,' and put the verb 'know' next to its object for clear syntax.'