Perfume— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), and complete your reason with specific details. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really like perfume. My favourite is a popular brand called Deep **** because it has a long-lasting, rich scent that suits special occasions. I like it especially for its warm, amber notes which make me feel confident.

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct vocabulary, make a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'hot fume' or 'fashionable people'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I wear perfume every day. I usually choose a light, fresh fragrance because it helps me feel more relaxed and confident, and it also leaves a pleasant impression when I meet other people.

Gợi ý: Organize your response: give a direct answer, then explain briefly with specific reason and a conditional statement. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., 'too expensive' not 'almost too expensive gift to').

Ví dụ: Not usually, because high-end perfumes are very expensive and I can't afford them often. However, if I had enough money or it was a special occasion, I would buy one as a gift for my boyfriend.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and compare clearly. Use correct comparative forms and specific examples of alternatives. Remove hesitations and make one clear supporting detail with a linking word.

Ví dụ: Yes, many designer perfumes are more expensive than everyday items. Therefore, I often use cheaper alternatives like room sprays or affordable Korean fragrances, which smell pleasant and cost much less.

× Absolutely yes I really like perfume.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I really like perfume.

Add a comma for natural speech pacing and separate interjection 'yes' from the sentence; not a grammar rule ID but fits article/flow: minor punctuation improves clarity. However no article error otherwise.

× In particular I really love poppin brand called deep **** which is really famous and uh umm expensive perfume That is because it has a lots of uh.

✓ In particular, I really love a popular brand called Deep ****, which is a very famous and expensive perfume. That is because it has a lot of appealing notes.

Original has incorrect adjective 'poppin' and awkward word order. Use 'a popular brand' (article + adjective + noun), capitalize brand name, use 'a very famous and expensive perfume' for natural modifiers, and 'a lot of' (not 'a lots of') when followed by noun. Suggest specifying 'appealing notes' rather than trailing filler. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, I usually use a hot fume every day.

✓ Yes, I usually use a perfume every day.

Incorrect word 'hot fume' seems wrong; use 'a perfume' with indefinite article before singular countable noun. Article error ID:22.

× That is because it makes me feel more relaxed and fashionable people.

✓ That is because it makes me feel more relaxed and more fashionable.

Original mixes singular feeling with 'people' incorrectly. Use parallel adjectives 'more relaxed and more fashionable' to describe the speaker. Problem type ID:13.

× So I really like perfume.

✓ So I really like perfume.

Sentence is fine; no change needed. Included to acknowledge correctness. Problem type ID:27

× Not really, that is because popium is almost too expensive gift to so I don't have a lot of money so I don't.

✓ Not really. That is because Popium is almost too expensive a gift, and I don't have a lot of money, so I wouldn't buy it.

Errors: missing article before 'gift' (use 'too expensive a gift'), run-on sentence and repetition. Also convert final clause to 'I wouldn't buy it' for clarity. Problem type ID:22.

× But however if I have a chance I would like to.

✓ However, if I had the chance, I would like to.

Avoid using both 'but' and 'however' together (redundant). Use conditional 'if I had the chance' for hypothetical situation. Problem type ID:16.

× I would like to give to my boyfriend.

✓ I would like to give it to my boyfriend.

Missing object pronoun 'it' for the gift; include 'it' to complete the verb's object. Problem type ID:12.

× Absolutely. I think popium is really expensive than other items so I usually use umm loom spray or Fabries which is really popular Korean perfume.

✓ Absolutely. I think Popium is much more expensive than other items, so I usually use room spray or Fabric softener sprays, which are very popular Korean fragrances.

Use comparative structure 'more expensive than' and include adverb 'much' for emphasis. Correct 'loom' to 'room' and 'Fabries' to 'fabric/Fragrances' and adjust plural agreement 'are very popular' since plural noun. Problem type ID:19.

× Uh, really cheaper?

✓ Uh, much cheaper.

Fragment 'really cheaper?' is informal and incomplete. Use 'much cheaper' as a concise comparative response. Problem type ID:13