Part 1
Giám khảo
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Thí sinh
Actually I can, especially when they are super vivid or emotional. Some feel uh, so real that I keep thinking about them the whole day. There was even one thing felt like a movie, I kept replacing it in my heart head.
Giám khảo
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Thí sinh
Oh definitely, I used to share my dreams with my mother because usually my mother tell me the reasons of having a dream and whatever I have told her that I have seen this so she keeps me. She give me the right way.
Giám khảo
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Thí sinh
Uh, well, I'm not sure, but I think some reflect, uh, what's going on in my mind. Like if I'm stressed, uh, I usually have weird dreams that don't make sense. I guess our brain just finds weird ways to process stuff while we sleep.
Giám khảo
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Thí sinh
Absolutely yes uh, I just want to make my dreams come true because uh, whatever I have seen in my dreams are my insights or like I can say it's my uh behavior and if I am having a dream of.
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct awkward phrasing, and limit to 3–4 coherent sentences. Add a brief specific example to make it vivid. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.
Ví dụ: Yes, I can, particularly when my dreams are very vivid or emotional. For example, I once dreamt of walking through a cinema-like scene that felt so real I thought about it all day. Because it was so detailed and emotional, it stayed with me for several days.
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence: give a direct topic sentence, remove repetition, and explain briefly why you share dreams using linking words. Correct tense and pronoun usage.
Ví dụ: Yes, I often share my dreams with my mother because she tries to interpret them. She usually explains possible reasons, so her interpretations help me understand my feelings better.
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Remove fillers and strengthen structure: begin with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for instance, therefore) and richer vocabulary such as "reflect" or "manifest."
Ví dụ: I think some dreams can have meanings because they often reflect our current emotions. For instance, when I am stressed I tend to have bizarre or unsettling dreams, which suggests my brain is processing anxiety during sleep.
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Clarify and complete your idea: state your main point clearly, avoid unfinished sentences and fillers, and give a concrete reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 polished sentences and explain what you mean by "dreams" (aspirations or literal dreams).
Ví dụ: Yes, I do want to make my dreams come true, especially when I mean life goals rather than nightly dreams. For example, if I dream about becoming a designer, I take concrete steps like studying design and building a portfolio to turn that goal into reality.
× Actually I can, especially when they are super vivid or emotional.
✓ Actually I can, especially when they are very vivid or emotional.
Use 'very' instead of informal 'super' for more standard English; this is a present tense statement describing current ability. Replace colloquial adverb with standard one to improve formality and correctness.
× Some feel uh, so real that I keep thinking about them the whole day.
✓ Some feel so real that I keep thinking about them all day.
'the whole day' is acceptable but 'all day' is more natural. Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. This corrects sentence fluency and register.
× There was even one thing felt like a movie, I kept replacing it in my heart head.
✓ There was even one dream that felt like a movie; I kept replaying it in my head.
Original sentence has missing relative pronoun and wrong phrasing. Use 'dream' instead of vague 'thing', add 'that' to link clause, replace comma with semicolon or period, and use 'replaying it in my head' for correct idiom ('heart head' is incorrect).
× Oh definitely, I used to share my dreams with my mother because usually my mother tell me the reasons of having a dream and whatever I have told her that I have seen this so she keeps me.
✓ Oh definitely, I used to share my dreams with my mother because usually my mother tells me the reasons for a dream, and whenever I told her what I had seen, she comforted me.
Several issues: 'tell' should be 'tells' for third person singular present; 'the reasons of having a dream' should be 'the reasons for a dream'; tense consistency requires 'told' and 'had seen' for past reference; 'she keeps me' is unclear—use 'she comforted me' or 'she reassured me' to convey meaning.
× She give me the right way.
✓ She gives me the right advice.
Use 'gives' for third person singular present. 'the right way' is vague; 'the right advice' or 'tells me the right thing to do' is clearer.
× Uh, well, I'm not sure, but I think some reflect, uh, what's going on in my mind.
✓ Well, I'm not sure, but I think some reflect what's going on in my mind.
Remove fillers 'uh' and ensure present tense 'reflect' matches plural 'some' (dreams). This cleans up discourse and maintains present-tense interpretation.
× Like if I'm stressed, uh, I usually have weird dreams that don't make sense.
✓ If I'm stressed, I usually have weird dreams that don't make sense.
Remove filler 'uh' and keep present tense structure; sentence is otherwise correct.
× I guess our brain just finds weird ways to process stuff while we sleep.
✓ I guess our brains just find weird ways to process things while we sleep.
Use plural 'brains' to match 'our', and 'things' is more appropriate than 'stuff' in semi-formal speech. Present tense agreement: 'brains... find'.
× Absolutely yes uh, I just want to make my dreams come true because uh, whatever I have seen in my dreams are my insights or like I can say it's my uh behavior and if I am having a dream of.
✓ Absolutely yes, I just want to make my dreams come true because what I have seen in my dreams are my insights; I could say they reflect my behavior or my aspirations.
Complex run-on with filler words and incomplete ending. Remove 'uh', ensure subject-verb agreement ('what I have seen... are'), replace vague 'or like I can say it's my uh behavior' with clearer phrasing 'they reflect my behavior or my aspirations', and complete the thought. Maintain present perfect 'have seen' for experience.