Dreams— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be slightly more concise and add a clear topic sentence followed by a specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to connect the main idea and the example (e.g., “for example” or “often”). Avoid repeating words like “especially” twice.

Ví dụ: Yes, I can often remember my dreams, particularly right after I wake up. For example, I sometimes recall vivid sensations such as intense fear or sudden joy that stay with me for a few minutes.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a short reason. Use a linking word like “because” or “for example” to make the connection clear. Correct small grammar (share it → share them; believed → believes).

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually share my dreams with my girlfriend and family because they find them interesting. For example, my mother believes dreams can predict the future, so she always asks me to tell her what I dreamed.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence that states your view, then briefly contrast it with your mother’s belief using a linking phrase such as “however” or “whereas.” Provide one concrete example of how your view explains a specific dream. Avoid vague phrasing like “and so we can use that.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I think dreams have meanings, but not prophetic ones. Whereas my mother thinks dreams predict the future, I believe they reflect memories or current worries; for example, dreaming about school exams usually means I am anxious about performance.

Gợi ý: Provide a concise topic sentence and then two brief supporting points (one for positive dreams, one for negative). Use clear linking words (“however”, “for example”) and correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., “I was chased by a serial killer” rather than “I got changed by”). Avoid repetition and keep sentences within five. End with a short concluding sentence.

Ví dụ: It depends on the dream: I would want positive dreams to come true because they make me happy, but I would never want nightmares to happen. For example, I once dreamed I was chased by a serial killer, which felt terrifying, so I definitely would not want that to occur in real life.

× Yes, I usually share it with my girlfriend and my family.

✓ Yes, I usually share them with my girlfriend and my family.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'dreams' which is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'them' to match the antecedent. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they replace.

× My mom in particular is quite superstitious and she strongly believed that we can interpret or see into the future using our dreams.

✓ My mom in particular is quite superstitious and she strongly believes that we can interpret or see into the future using our dreams.

The sentence mixes present description ('is quite superstitious') with past tense 'believed'. Use present tense 'believes' to be consistent because the mother's belief is presented as a current, continuing trait. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing ongoing states.

× Like I've mentioned, my mom believes that we can use dreams to see into the future, whereas I believe that dreams come from pieces of memories or things we worry about, and so we can use that.

✓ Like I mentioned, my mom believes that we can use dreams to see into the future, whereas I believe that dreams come from pieces of memories or things we worry about, so we can use them.

Use 'I mentioned' (simple past or 'I've mentioned' is acceptable but simpler to use 'I mentioned' in spoken recounting). More importantly, 'that' incorrectly refers back to 'dreams' (plural) so use 'them'. Also replacing 'and so' with 'so' improves flow. Suggestion: ensure pronoun reference matches number and keep connector choice natural.

× For the good dreams, obviously yes, and because it made me feel so good and on the top of the world really.

✓ For good dreams, obviously yes, because they make me feel so good, on top of the world.

The original mixes tenses and has redundant words. 'Good dreams' is plural, so use 'they make' (present). Remove 'because' duplication and tighten phrasing. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and simplify to avoid fragmented clauses.

× For example, there's this one dream that I got changed by a serial killer.

✓ For example, there was one dream in which I was killed by a serial killer.

The original is ungrammatical: 'I got changed' is incorrect and unclear. Use passive past 'I was killed' or 'in which a serial killer killed me' to express the idea. Also 'there's' (there is) should match past context 'there was' because the dream is a past experience. Suggestion: use clear verb forms and correct tense for past events.

× I wouldn't that I wouldn't want that to happen.

✓ I wouldn't want that to happen.

The sentence contains a duplicated fragment 'I wouldn't that I wouldn't'. Remove the extra words to form the correct conditional negative 'I wouldn't want that to happen'. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repetition and keep sentences concise.