Holidays— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler phrases like "If I'm not mistaken" and improve grammar by saying "one of the best tourist destinations." Also, add a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: I went to Bali with my family two years ago because it is one of the best tourist destinations in Indonesia, known for its beautiful beaches and culture.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to organize your points logically and complete your thoughts.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they refresh my body and mind. Moreover, I have the chance to meet new people and build new connections.

Gợi ý: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Specify the holiday by name or date, avoid vague terms like "853," and complete your sentences. Provide specific details and use linking words to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: My favorite public holiday is Independence Day on August 17th because I can reunite with my extended family, spend quality time together, and create lasting memories. For example, last year I went back to my hometown to celebrate with them.

Gợi ý: Your answer covers several activities but could be more fluent and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct phrases like "take some videos for my content." Also, pluralize "Indonesian novels."

Ví dụ: First, I usually travel abroad during holidays. In addition, I create videos for my content since I am a content creator. Finally, I enjoy reading my favorite Indonesian novels.

Gợi ý: Your answer is understandable but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating "also" and improve phrasing like "go to somewhere" to "go somewhere." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like spending my days at home because I am an introvert. Going out every day drains my energy, and staying home helps me avoid negative feelings.

Gợi ý: Your answer has grammar errors and unclear phrases. Instead of "prefer to just former," say "prefer a leisurely holiday." Use correct verb forms like "scrolling" to "scroll." Also, connect ideas with linking words.

Ví dụ: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I work hard and don't want to spend my free time being busy. I usually scroll through social media and watch my favorite series on Netflix.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and informal. Use complete sentences and linking words. Replace "represent that" with "express myself." Also, clarify "Best ever" or omit it for formality.

Ví dụ: I prefer an exciting holiday because I am an expressive person and want to express myself. I enjoy making my holidays interesting and creating lasting memories.

× If I'm not mistaken, 2 years ago I decided to go to Bali because Bali is one of the best tourist destination in Indonesia.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, 2 years ago I decided to go to Bali because Bali is one of the best tourist destinations in Indonesia.

The noun 'destination' should be plural 'destinations' because it refers to one among many tourist destinations in Indonesia. Using the singular form here is incorrect when referring to a category or group.

× because for me personally if I go to somewhere it means like I give my body and my mind refreshing and also I get new connection to build new connection with strangers and also I get new.

✓ because for me personally if I go somewhere it means I give my body and my mind a refresh and also I get new connections to build with strangers and also I get new experiences.

The phrase 'go to somewhere' is incorrect; 'go somewhere' is the correct form. Also, 'give my body and my mind refreshing' is awkward; 'give my body and my mind a refresh' is clearer. 'New connection' should be plural 'new connections' to indicate multiple relationships. The sentence was incomplete and unclear, so it was improved for clarity.

× I like 853 because I can meet my big family and also my main family.

✓ I like 853 because I can meet my extended family and also my immediate family.

The phrase 'big family' is not standard; 'extended family' is more appropriate. 'Main family' is unclear; 'immediate family' is the correct term. This correction improves clarity and correctness.

× For example, at that time last year I went back to my hometown and I'm.

✓ For example, at that time last year I went back to my hometown.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and I'm' which is incomplete and incorrect. Removing the incomplete phrase corrects the sentence structure.

× First thing first, I will do travelling especially abroad.

✓ First things first, I will travel especially abroad.

The phrase 'do travelling' is incorrect; the verb 'travel' should be used directly. Also, 'First thing first' should be 'First things first' as the correct idiomatic expression.

× Not only that, I take some videos to my content because now I am a content creator.

✓ Not only that, I take some videos for my content because now I am a content creator.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate purpose or benefit.

× The last one is I just read my favorite novels, especially Indonesian novel.

✓ The last one is I just read my favorite novels, especially Indonesian novels.

The word 'novel' should be plural 'novels' to agree with 'favorite novels' and to indicate multiple books.

× Yes I do because I am an introvert person and also if I always go to somewhere every day it will drain my energy and also I don't want to have negative energy in myself.

✓ Yes I do because I am an introverted person and also if I always go somewhere every day it will drain my energy and also I don't want to have negative energy within myself.

The phrase 'go to somewhere' is incorrect; 'go somewhere' is correct. 'Introvert person' should be 'introverted person' as the adjective form. 'In myself' is better expressed as 'within myself'.

× I prefer to just former because I am a worker and I don't want to spend my holiday to busy time.

✓ I prefer the former because I am a worker and I don't want to spend my holiday in busy times.

'Just former' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'the former' to refer to the first option. 'Spend my holiday to busy time' is incorrect; 'in busy times' or 'having a busy time' is correct.

× I just want to scrolling my social media and also watching my favorite series on Netflix.

✓ I just want to scroll through my social media and also watch my favorite series on Netflix.

After 'want to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'scroll through' is the correct phrasal verb for browsing social media.

× My holiday is so interesting and I want to create my memory. Best ever.

✓ My holiday is so interesting and I want to create memories. The best ever.

'Create my memory' is incorrect; 'create memories' is the correct phrase. 'Best ever' should be a separate sentence or connected properly for clarity.