Part 1
Giám khảo
Have you ever borrowed money from others?
Thí sinh
Actually no, I have never borrowed money from other people as I usually manage my finance carefully so I still avoid boring money. Also, I really believe in saving money for emergencies and it may make me feel uncomfortable when borrowing money from other people.
Giám khảo
Have you ever lent money to others?
Thí sinh
Actually no, lending money to others may make her relationship much more complicated and I am really worried about not getting my money back, which may lead to another awkward situation. Instead, Ioffer my friends some suggestions on CAIR to help them through troubles.
Have you ever borrowed money from others?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在拼写错误(boring money应为borrowing money),且句子较长,表达略显重复。建议注意拼写准确性,简化句子结构,避免冗余,使表达更自然流畅。
Ví dụ: No, I have never borrowed money from others because I manage my finances carefully. I prefer to save money for emergencies, so I feel uncomfortable asking to borrow money.
Have you ever lent money to others?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误('her relationship'应为'the relationship'),拼写错误('ioffer'应为'I offer'),且表达不够连贯。建议注意语法和拼写,使用连接词使句子更流畅,并具体说明CAIR的含义或替代表达。
Ví dụ: No, I have never lent money to others because it can complicate the relationship. I worry about not getting my money back, which could cause awkwardness. Instead, I offer my friends advice to help them solve their problems.
× Actually no, I have never borrowed money from other people as I usually manage my finance carefully so I still avoid boring money.
✓ Actually no, I have never borrowed money from other people as I usually manage my finances carefully so I still avoid borrowing money.
finance 是不可数名词,表示财务状况,通常用复数形式 finances 表示个人的财务状况。boring 是形容词,意思是无聊的,应该用动名词 borrowing 表示借钱的动作。
× Actually no, I have never borrowed money from other people as I usually manage my finance carefully so I still avoid boring money.
✓ Actually no, I have never borrowed money from other people as I usually manage my finances carefully so I still avoid borrowing money.
avoid 后面应接动名词形式,表示避免做某事,故应使用 borrowing 而非 boring。
× Actually no, lending money to others may make her relationship much more complicated and I am really worried about not getting my money back, which may lead to another awkward situation.
✓ Actually no, lending money to others may make the relationship much more complicated and I am really worried about not getting my money back, which may lead to another awkward situation.
这里的 her relationship 用词不当,应使用 the relationship 指代双方关系。modal verb may 用法正确,无需修改。
× Actually no, lending money to others may make her relationship much more complicated and I am really worried about not getting my money back, which may lead to another awkward situation.
✓ Actually no, lending money to others may make the relationship much more complicated and I am really worried about not getting my money back, which may lead to another awkward situation.
relationship 是可数名词,前面用 her 作为限定词不合适,应使用定冠词 the 来指代特定关系。
× Instead, Ioffer my friends some suggestions on CAIR to help them through troubles.
✓ Instead, I offer my friends some suggestions on CAIR to help them through troubles.
Ioffer 是拼写错误,应分开为 I offer,保证句子结构正确。