Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the placewhere you live?
Thí sinh
To be honest, actually I'm living in the main part of the city near the downtown, so there's too much grass walks over there. They're always many peoples who are going here and there for their work, so there is always a traffic of people near to my house.
Giám khảo
Is there anything you would like to change aboutthe traffic in your area?
Thí sinh
One thing which I make to change in my area is regarding the rules for the pedestrians because sometime they usually come in front of the cars that it really make it difficult for the people who are driving. So I think there should be more strict rules for the pedestrians also.
Are there a lot of crosswalks around the place where you live?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'grass walks' instead of 'crosswalks' and 'many peoples' instead of 'many people'. Try to use precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.
Ví dụ: Yes, there are many crosswalks around where I live because I live near downtown. As a result, a lot of people use them to commute to work, so the area is usually busy with pedestrian traffic.
Is there anything you would like to change about the traffic in your area?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'One thing which I make to change' and 'more strict rules for the pedestrians also'. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to improve coherence. Be specific about what changes you want and why.
Ví dụ: I would like to see stricter rules for pedestrians in my area because sometimes they cross the street unexpectedly, which makes it difficult for drivers to react safely. Implementing clearer regulations could improve traffic safety for everyone.
× there's too much grass walks over there
✓ there are too many crosswalks over there
The phrase 'too much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'grass walks' is intended to mean 'crosswalks', which is a countable noun. Therefore, 'too many' should be used with the plural noun 'crosswalks'. Also, 'grass walks' is incorrect; the correct term is 'crosswalks'.
× They're always many peoples who are going here and there for their work
✓ There are always many people who are going here and there for their work
'Peoples' is incorrect in this context; 'people' is the plural form of 'person' and does not take an 's'. Also, the sentence structure is incorrect; 'They're always many peoples' should be 'There are always many people'.
× there is always a traffic of people near to my house
✓ there is always traffic of people near my house
The word 'traffic' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article 'a'. Also, 'near to my house' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'near my house'.
× One thing which I make to change in my area is regarding the rules for the pedestrians
✓ One thing I would change in my area is regarding the rules for pedestrians
The phrase 'I make to change' is incorrect. The correct form to express a desired change is 'I would change'. Also, 'the pedestrians' can be simplified to 'pedestrians' unless referring to specific ones.
× because sometime they usually come in front of the cars that it really make it difficult for the people who are driving
✓ because sometimes they usually come in front of cars, which really makes it difficult for the people who are driving
The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'It really make' should be 'it really makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'the cars' can be simplified to 'cars'. The sentence structure is improved by replacing 'that' with 'which' and adding a comma.
× So I think there should be more strict rules for the pedestrians also
✓ So I think there should be stricter rules for pedestrians as well
The phrase 'more strict' is less common and 'stricter' is the correct comparative form of 'strict'. Also, 'for the pedestrians' can be simplified to 'for pedestrians'. 'Also' at the end is better replaced with 'as well' for smoother flow.