Shopping— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 감정을 표현할 때 구체적인 단어를 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'shopping always brings me joy, especially when I feel sad'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like shopping because it always brings me joy. Especially when I feel sad, buying clothes or makeup makes me feel better, like giving myself a small surprise.

Gợi ý: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 길어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 간결하게 핵심을 전달하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'I don't always compare prices, but I try to because it's important to manage money wisely.'

Ví dụ: I don't always compare prices, but I try to because it's important to manage money wisely. Since we are adults, we need to think about our future and spend carefully.

Gợi ý: 답변이 다소 길고 중복된 부분이 있습니다. 주제를 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I usually make decisions quickly because I shop with friends or family who help me.'

Ví dụ: I usually make decisions quickly because I shop with friends or family who help me by giving their opinions.

Gợi ý: 문장이 어색하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 바꾸고, 구체적인 예를 들어 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'No, expensive products are not always better. For example, I often find cheaper makeup products that work better.'

Ví dụ: No, expensive products are not always better. For example, I often find cheaper makeup products that work better than expensive ones.

× Yes, I do like the shopping it always brings me. And you emotion in my life.

✓ Yes, I do like shopping; it always brings me emotion in my life.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation, causing confusion. Correcting it by separating clauses with a semicolon and removing the article 'the' before 'shopping' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I can you close this or you make up?

✓ Can you close this or your makeup?

The original sentence misuses pronouns and is unclear. It seems the student meant to refer to 'clothes' and 'makeup' but used 'close' and 'make up' incorrectly. Correcting pronouns and word choice clarifies the meaning.

× I started to feel better with myself, like I did a mini surprise for myself.

✓ I start to feel better about myself, like I gave myself a mini surprise.

The tense is inconsistent with the context; present tense fits better. Also, 'feel better with myself' is incorrect; 'feel better about myself' is the correct expression. 'Did a mini surprise' is awkward; 'gave myself a mini surprise' is clearer.

× Not always, but I'm trying to do this 'cause it's really important to see. How much money is spent on the shopping, how much money is spent on the closes in on your makeup or other stuff that you buy 'cause we are adults and we have to think about our future.

✓ Not always, but I try to do this because it's really important to see how much money is spent on shopping, on clothes, on your makeup, or other stuff that you buy because we are adults and have to think about our future.

Incorrect prepositions 'on the shopping' and 'on the closes in on your makeup' are corrected to 'on shopping' and 'on clothes, on your makeup'. Also, 'I'm trying to do this' is better as 'I try to do this' for habitual action. 'Cause' is expanded to 'because' for formality.

× Not always 'cause most of the time I go shopping with my friends or family or close people from work, so I also can ask for their opinion, but most of the time I really choose very fast what I want to buy.

✓ Not always, because most of the time I go shopping with my friends, family, or close colleagues from work, so I can also ask for their opinion, but most of the time I choose very quickly what I want to buy.

'Close people from work' is awkward; 'close colleagues from work' is better. 'I also can' is corrected to 'I can also' for natural word order. 'Very fast' is better as 'very quickly' since it modifies a verb.

× No, they're not Absolutely not 'cause I buy myself finding a product, specially in makeup product.

✓ No, they're not. Absolutely not, because I find products for myself, especially makeup products.

The phrase 'I buy myself finding a product' is incorrect; it should be 'I find products for myself'. 'Specially' is corrected to 'especially'. Also, punctuation is added for clarity.

× That they are cheaper and even the better than the expensive ones.

✓ They are cheaper and even better than the expensive ones.

The phrase 'the better' is incorrect; it should be 'better' without 'the'. Also, 'that' at the beginning is unnecessary and removed for clarity.