工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ và rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh dùng những cụm từ không tự nhiên như "business worker" và nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn hơn để tránh dài dòng.

示例: I currently work in a company as a business analyst. My main duties include analyzing market trends, developing strategies, and coordinating with different departments to meet company goals.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác, ví dụ "college" không đúng trong ngữ cảnh này, có thể bạn muốn nói "colleagues". Câu trả lời cũng nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để tự nhiên hơn.

示例: I work at a company known for its dynamic environment and the chance to collaborate with a team of dedicated and knowledgeable colleagues.

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ lặp lại và tiếng ừ ừ (fillers) như "uh", "umm" để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như "colleagues" thay vì "college".

示例: I think it's a great place to work because it offers valuable opportunities to collaborate with dedicated and knowledgeable colleagues. Moreover, I get to meet many talented and interesting people.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi phát âm và từ vựng không chính xác như "college" thay vì "colleagues", và các từ không rõ ràng như "UH", "UMM". Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, dùng từ đúng và tránh lặp lại để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I really like my workplace because I can meet many talented and interesting people, including my colleagues, which helps me expand my network and learn new skills.

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ không rõ nghĩa hoặc viết tắt không phổ biến như "measure" hay "TA" mà không giải thích. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để truyền đạt ý định tương lai một cách hiệu quả.

示例: Honestly, I am studying international business management, and in the future, I hope to start my own business. Currently, I am learning new skills and constantly trying to improve myself.

× Well, I'm working in a company which is well known for dynamic environment and the opportunity to work with a team of dedicated and knowledgeable college.

✓ Well, I'm working in a company which is well known for its dynamic environment and the opportunity to work with a team of dedicated and knowledgeable colleagues.

The word 'dynamic' is an adjective describing 'environment', so it needs the possessive pronoun 'its' before 'dynamic environment' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'college' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'colleagues' meaning coworkers. This improves clarity and correctness.

× I think it's a great place to work because, uh, it gives me valuable opportunities to work with a team of dedicated and knowledgeable college, uh, Moreover, uh, it gives me, uh, many opportunities to, umm, meet many talented and interesting people.

✓ I think it's a great place to work because it gives me valuable opportunities to work with a team of dedicated and knowledgeable colleagues. Moreover, it gives me many opportunities to meet many talented and interesting people.

The word 'college' is incorrectly used instead of 'colleagues'. Also, unnecessary filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' should be removed for clarity. Correct pronoun usage and word choice improve the sentence's grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I really like the place where I work as UH. I can see I can meet many talented and interesting people, including my professors and my college UMM, which helps me to expand my network and learn new skills from them.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work because I can meet many talented and interesting people, including my professors and my colleagues, which helps me to expand my network and learn new skills from them.

The phrase 'as UH' is unclear and likely a typo; replacing it with 'because' clarifies the sentence. Also, 'college' should be 'colleagues' to refer to coworkers. Correct pronoun and word usage enhance clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Umm honestly my measure is international business management and in the future I hope to start my own business.

✓ Honestly, my major is international business management, and in the future, I hope to start my own business.

The word 'measure' is incorrect; the correct word is 'major' to indicate field of study. Adding commas improves sentence flow. Correct word choice and punctuation are necessary for grammatical accuracy.

× So in so currently I am learning new TA. I'm constantly learning new things and try to sharpen my skills.

✓ So currently, I am learning new things. I'm constantly learning new things and trying to sharpen my skills.

The phrase 'learning new TA' is unclear; assuming 'things' is intended. Also, 'try' should be 'trying' to maintain parallel structure with 'I'm constantly learning'. Correct verb forms and clarity improve the sentence.