工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: သင်၏အဖြေသည် သဘာဝကျပြီး ထိရောက်မှုရှိစေရန် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ အသုံးပြုပါ။ "challenger" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးသည် မှားယွင်းသုံးထားပြီး "challenge" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်သင့်သည်။ ထို့အပြင် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ချိတ်ဆက်ရန် "and" နှင့် "but" များကို သုံးပါ။

示例: Currently, I am working in a traditional clothing shop while preparing for my IELTS test. This is my first time managing both work and study simultaneously, so it is quite a challenge for me, but I am confident I can overcome it.

建议: အချိန်နှင့် သက်ဆိုင်ရာ စကားလုံးများကို မှန်ကန်စွာ အသုံးပြုပါ။ "one years" ကို "one year" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ "memory" ကို "memories" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်သင့်သည်။ ထို့အပြင် ပိုမိုအသေးစိတ် ဖော်ပြရန် ကြိုးစားပါ။

示例: I work at a traditional clothing shop located in Nada Goyango. I have been living there for one year, and I have many fond memories with my coworkers.

建议: စကားလုံးများကို သေချာစွာ ချိတ်ဆက်ပြီး သဒ္ဒါမှန်စွာ အသုံးပြုပါ။ "My but my boss" ဆိုသော အပိုဒ်သည် မှားယွင်းနေပြီး "But my boss" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ "allow" ကို "allows" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။

示例: Yes, absolutely. It is the perfect place for me because I can work while preparing for my exam. In Myanmar, it is hard to find a job that allows you to work and study at the same time, but my boss is kind and permits me to do so.

建议: "play" ကို "place" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ချိတ်ဆက်ရန် "not only... but also" စကားပုံကို သုံးပါ။ ထို့အပြင် စကားလုံးများကို တိကျစွာ ပြောဆိုပါ။

示例: Yes, I really like the place where I work, not only because of the environment and the building but also because of my kind and honest coworkers and boss. I actually don't feel like I am at a workplace; it feels like my own family.

建议: "architects" ကို "an architect" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ "I always wanted" ကို "I have always wanted" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ချိတ်ဆက်ရန် "and" များကို သုံးပါ။

示例: Honestly, I'm not interested in business or marketing. I have always wanted to be an architect since I was a little girl, and if I have the chance to continue my tertiary education, I will become an architect in the future.

× Currently I'm working in a chain traditional clothing shop and also preparing for my IELTS test.

✓ Currently I'm working in a chain of traditional clothing shops and also preparing for my IELTS test.

The phrase 'a chain traditional clothing shop' is incorrect because 'chain' should be followed by 'of' and the noun should be plural to indicate multiple shops. The correct form is 'a chain of traditional clothing shops'. 'chain' is a countable noun that requires 'of' to link to the items it contains, and the items should be plural.

× I have been living for one years in this place and I have a lot of memory with my coworkers.

✓ I have been living in this place for one year and I have a lot of memories with my coworkers.

The phrase 'one years' is incorrect because 'one' requires the singular form 'year'. Also, 'a lot of memory' should be 'a lot of memories' because 'memory' is countable in this context and plural is needed. Correct quantifier usage is important: 'one year' (singular) and 'a lot of memories' (plural).

× I have been living for one years in this place and I have a lot of memory with my coworkers.

✓ I have been living in this place for one year and I have a lot of memories with my coworkers.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly placed before 'one years'. The correct preposition to indicate duration is 'for' placed before the time expression, and 'in' is used for location. Correct order: 'living in this place for one year'. Also, 'one years' should be 'one year'.

× In Myanmar, it is hard to find a job that allow you to work and study at the same time.

✓ In Myanmar, it is hard to find a job that allows you to work and study at the same time.

The verb 'allow' should be in the third person singular form 'allows' to agree with the singular noun 'job'. Modal verb usage and subject-verb agreement require 'allows' here.

× My but my boss is kind and allow me.

✓ But my boss is kind and allows me.

The verb 'allow' should be 'allows' to agree with the singular subject 'boss'. Also, 'My but' is incorrect; it should be just 'But'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'allows' for third person singular subjects.

× Yes, I really like the play where I work not only about the environment and the building.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work not only because of the environment and the building.

The word 'play' is a typo and should be 'place'. Also, the phrase 'not only about' is incorrect; it should be 'not only because of' to connect reasons. Correct pronoun and phrase usage improves clarity.

× I actually I don't feel like I'm living in a workplace. I feel like my my own family.

✓ Actually, I don't feel like I'm living in a workplace. I feel like my own family.

The repeated 'I' and 'my' are errors. Removing the duplicates corrects the sentence. Avoid repetition of pronouns for grammatical correctness.

× I always wanted to be architects and I was a little girl, and if I have a chance to continue my tertiary education, I will be an architect in the future.

✓ I always wanted to be an architect when I was a little girl, and if I have a chance to continue my tertiary education, I will be an architect in the future.

The word 'architects' should be singular 'an architect' because it refers to a single profession. Also, 'I was a little girl' should be connected properly with 'when'. Singular and plural forms must agree with the intended meaning.