工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat long and a bit unclear due to grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to give a clear, concise response with correct grammar and avoid unnecessary repetition. Also, finish your sentences properly.

示例: I have been working as an account manager at a private company since 2014. I enjoy this job because it involves connecting with customers and plays an important role in the company.

建议: Your answer has grammar errors and is a bit unclear. Try to structure your answer clearly with correct verb forms and avoid filler words. Also, be more specific and concise.

示例: I work for a private company that produces personal care products like shampoo and body wash.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and contains many filler words which affect clarity. Try to avoid fillers and redundancy. Use linking words properly to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work. Although the job can be demanding, we have a supportive manager and kind colleagues, which makes the environment pleasant.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains minor grammar mistakes and some redundancy. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repeating similar adjectives.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy working here because we have a nice building and welcoming colleagues across all teams.

建议: Your answer has grammar mistakes and filler words. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid fillers. Also, organize your ideas clearly with linking words.

示例: I plan to upgrade my skills by taking online courses, and hopefully, I will become the manager of our team someday.

× I really like this job because it's very important position in my company and we should connect with people, customers and always be.

✓ I really like this job because it's a very important position in my company and we should connect with people, customers and always be.

The phrase 'very important position' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'very important position' because it is a singular, countable noun being mentioned for the first time.

× I work in a private company that produce a washing products such as shampoo and other things for washing hair, your body, your face.

✓ I work in a private company that produces washing products such as shampoo and other things for washing hair, your body, your face.

The noun 'products' is plural and does not need the article 'a' before it. Also, 'produce' should be 'produces' to agree with the singular subject 'company'.

× I work in a private company that produce a washing products such as shampoo and other things for washing hair, your body, your face.

✓ I work in a private company that produces washing products such as shampoo and other things for washing hair, your body, your face.

The verb 'produce' must be in the third person singular form 'produces' to agree with the singular subject 'company'.

× Yes, absolutely it, it is, uh, despite it's uh, demanding and overwhelming job, but uh, we have good manager, supportive manager with kind people and colleagues.

✓ Yes, absolutely, it is, uh, despite it being a demanding and overwhelming job, we have a good, supportive manager and kind colleagues.

The pronoun 'it's' (it is) is incorrectly used; 'it being' is correct here. Also, articles are missing before 'good manager' and 'supportive manager', and 'colleagues' should not be preceded by 'and' without proper structure.

× Yes, I really enjoy working in this place because we have a nice building, we have a nice colleagues, all teams in our company are welcoming.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy working in this place because we have a nice building, we have nice colleagues, and all teams in our company are welcoming.

The adjective 'nice' should not be preceded by 'a' when modifying the plural noun 'colleagues'. Also, the sentence needs 'and' before 'all teams' for proper coordination.

× I have planned for upgrade my skills in my position and uh, some online courses I had linked to my devices to watch in the future and uh, maybe someday I should be a manager of our team.

✓ I have planned to upgrade my skills in my position and, uh, have linked some online courses to my devices to watch in the future, and, uh, maybe someday I will be a manager of our team.

The phrase 'planned for upgrade' is incorrect; it should be 'planned to upgrade'. Also, 'I had linked' is better as 'have linked' to indicate recent action. 'Should be' is replaced with 'will be' to express future intention more naturally.