工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免语气词如“uh”，使语言更自然流畅；句子结构应更完整，避免断断续续；回答应直接回应问题，简洁明了地说明身份和工作经历。

示例: I am currently a student, but I have worked part-time at a grocery store where I helped my boss by checking items on the shelves to ensure they were properly stocked.

建议: 回答内容不清晰，表达混乱，缺乏逻辑和具体信息。建议用简单明了的句子描述工作地点和职责，避免语法错误和不完整句子。

示例: I work at a company called Cass Accs. My main job is to protect soybeans, especially when the leaves are not healthy, by taking care of them properly.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用正确的时态和词汇，清楚说明工作环境和待遇，避免模糊不清的表达。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it has air conditioning, so the temperature is comfortable. Also, they pay a good salary and provide scholarships.

建议: 回答应避免断句不完整，注意句子连贯性。建议明确表达喜欢的原因，使用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is very close to my dormitory. I can walk there in about 10 minutes, which is very convenient. Also, my colleagues at the college are very friendly.

建议: 回答表达了未来计划，但句子重复且不够流畅。建议使用多样的句型和词汇，避免重复，清晰表达研究目标和期望成果。

示例: In the future, I plan to conduct research on soybeans using the CRISPR-Cas9 system, which relates to my major. I hope to make significant achievements in this field through my studies.

× I have a ID but I did some uh, part time job before I was working at the grocery store and I helped the my boss to check items on the shelves to make sure they're.

✓ I have an ID but I did some uh, part-time jobs before. I was working at the grocery store and I helped my boss check items on the shelves to make sure they're correct.

冠词使用错误，'ID'以元音音素开头，应使用'an'而非'a'。'part time job'应为复数形式'part-time jobs'，因为表示多次兼职工作。去掉多余的定冠词'the'。此外，'helped my boss to check'中不需要不定式'to'，直接用动词原形。

× I helped the my boss to check items on the shelves to make sure they're.

✓ I helped my boss check items on the shelves to make sure they're correct.

'the my boss'中'the'和'my'不能同时使用，应去掉'the'。另外，句尾缺少完整内容，补充完整。

× I helped the my boss to check items on the shelves to make sure they're.

✓ I helped my boss check items on the shelves to make sure they're correct.

句子不完整，缺少谓语部分，导致表达不清晰。应补充完整句子，使意思明确。

× I work at the Cass accs. I'm a student working here. My job, my main job is to protect the soybean where when the leather is not very well, I will protect those I will help my.

✓ I work at Cass Accs. I'm a student working here. My main job is to protect the soybeans. When the leather is not very good, I will protect them and help my colleagues.

句子结构混乱，表达不完整。'protect the soybean where when the leather is not very well'语义不清，应拆分并重组句子。'soybean'应为复数'soybeans'。补充缺失内容，使句子完整通顺。

× My job, my main job is to protect the soybean where when the leather is not very well, I will protect those I will help my.

✓ My main job is to protect the soybeans. When the leather is not very good, I will protect them and help my colleagues.

'soybean'应使用复数形式'soybeans'，因为指的是多个大豆。

× because it have the conditionary, I can work there in a very proper temperature and they give you the highest.

✓ because it has the air conditioning, I can work there at a very proper temperature and they give you the highest salary.

主语'it'为第三人称单数，谓语动词应为'has'而非'have'。'conditionary'应为'air conditioning'。补充完整句子，使表达清晰。

× because it have the conditionary, I can work there in a very proper temperature and they give you the highest.

✓ because it has the air conditioning, I can work there at a very proper temperature and they give you the highest salary.

主语'it'为第三人称单数，谓语动词应使用单数形式'has'。

× I like the place I work because it's very near from my It's not far from my dormitory.

✓ I like the place I work because it's very near my dormitory. It's not far from my dormitory.

'near'后不需要介词'from'，应直接接名词。

× I like the place I work because it's very near from my It's not far from my dormitory.

✓ I like the place I work because it's very near my dormitory. It's not far from my dormitory.

句子中断，缺少完整表达，应拆分为两个完整句子。

× I can walk here in 10 minutes.

✓ I can walk here in 10 minutes.

此句无明显语法错误，符合习惯表达。

× and the. At the college and my fellows are very nice.

✓ At the college, my fellows are very nice.

句子中多余的'and the.'应删除，句子应完整表达意思。

× I want to do some research about soybean using the CRISPR CAS 9 system because it's my major now.

✓ I want to do some research on soybeans using the CRISPR-Cas9 system because it's my major now.

'research about'应改为'research on'，'soybean'应为复数'soybeans'。'CRISPR CAS 9'应为'CRISPR-Cas9'。

× I want to do it in the future and do more research about it and make some and gain some achievements about the soybean researching.

✓ I want to do it in the future, do more research on it, and gain some achievements in soybean research.

句子结构混乱，重复使用'and'，表达不清晰。'research about'应为'research on'，'soybean researching'应为'soybean research'。应简化句子，使表达更流畅。