工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "I was banned at midnight oil" which seems incorrect. Try to be more concise and clear, directly answering the question with a topic sentence, then add supporting details using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

示例: I recently graduated with a bachelor's degree in hospitality management, and I used to work as a junior chef. I love cooking, but it can be a very demanding job, especially working late hours.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using consistent verb tenses and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid short, fragmented sentences. Provide more specific details about your experience to enrich your answer.

示例: I worked at an international restaurant called Deja Vu, located on Simeon Street. It was a great place where I learned to be flexible and to work well as part of a team.

建议: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "He make us feel" and "we had to aim it." Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, it was a very good place to work. Our executive chef was amazing and hardworking. He made us feel like one team with a shared goal that we all aimed to achieve.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by combining sentences using linking words to make it more coherent. Also, try to add more specific details to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I would. The atmosphere was great because my colleagues were very friendly and hardworking, which made it a wonderful place for me at that time.

建议: Your answer communicates your goals but has some grammatical errors, such as "a international" instead of "an international." Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details about your plans.

示例: I would like to move abroad to work in an international restaurant. My long-term goal is to become a great executive chef and manage a Michelin-starred restaurant.

× I was banned at midnight oil and it's a very difficult.

✓ I was burning the midnight oil and it was very difficult.

The phrase 'burning the midnight oil' is an idiomatic expression meaning to work late into the night. 'Banned' is incorrect here. Also, 'it's a very difficult' is incomplete; 'difficult' needs a noun to modify or should be 'it was very difficult' to match past tense.

× I was working in an international restaurant called Deja Vu and we're located in Simeon St.

✓ I was working in an international restaurant called Deja Vu and it was located on Simeon St.

Since the speaker refers to a past job, the location should be described in past tense 'was located'. Also, 'we're' (we are) is present tense and incorrect here. Additionally, the preposition 'on' is more appropriate for street addresses than 'in'.

× I learned. I've learned how to be flexible and how to be a good team worker.

✓ I learned how to be flexible and how to be a good team worker.

The sentence 'I learned.' is incomplete and unnecessary. Combining the two sentences into one past tense sentence is clearer and more grammatically correct.

× Our executive chef was an amazing and hardworking person.

✓ Our executive chef was an amazing and hardworking person.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× He make us feel that we're all one team and we had one goal and we had to aim it.

✓ He made us feel that we were all one team, and we had one goal that we had to aim for.

The verb 'make' should be in past tense 'made' to agree with 'He' and the past context. Also, 'we're' should be 'we were' to maintain past tense consistency. The phrase 'aim it' is incorrect; 'aim for' is the correct expression.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you worked?

Since the speaker no longer works there, the verb should be in past tense 'worked' to match the context.

× I really like to move abroad and work in a international restaurant and my long term aim is to be a great executive chef and run a Michelin star restaurant.

✓ I would really like to move abroad and work in an international restaurant, and my long-term aim is to be a great executive chef and run a Michelin star restaurant.

'I really like to move' is better expressed as 'I would really like to move' to indicate future intention politely. 'a international' should be 'an international' because 'international' starts with a vowel sound. 'long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term' when used as an adjective.